rate_review Reviews

Nooooooooooooooooooo! Please don't ever stop! This story is so brilliantly fantastic. I read the summary and title and my first thought was: sweet balls! This is gonna be like Queer As Folk!! And THEN you make the comparison in your AN and I friggin sqwee out loud. :3 You've just gotta update!!!! I need me some diner-running supportivemomma!Tsunade so bad! (Kudos and the Internet for using a Brian line btw!! Loved it like the fangirl I am)

Love it, more please.

I love it!!! I've always had a thing for yakuza sas/naru stories!!!

I've enjoyed the story so far, I do have a small problem though. If you are going to use drugs in a story research them please. X is never given on blotter paper or sheets. Acid or PCP are though. If that's what you meant. Also if you're going to use sex on drugs as well do the research for how drugs affect the act of sex. 99% of people cannot get off on X, yes it heightens the experiences of touch, sounds, sights, but it tends to constrict blood flow.

Like I said though it is well written and I am enjoying it.

I'm still upset that other people are unhappy with this story. Its awesome to wake up to the reality that people live everyday. I love this honestly gritty fiction, and I can't wait to see more.
This chapter felt more like a filler/advancement type chapter, so I'm hoping to see you and Babylon again soon.

I was a little confused by the chronology of events in this chapter. By the end it eventually became clear that they were having sex in Naruto's office building at the beginning and ending of the chapter, and all the stuff in between was how Sasuke got Naruto to give him a second (and third, and fourth...) chance, but as I was reading it, I wasn't too sure what was going on. It wasn't that clear in the beginning where they were, and I wasn't sure if they'd finished or what had happened once the flashback started. That's NOT to say I wanted you to write "flashback" in the middle of the chapter (I hate that, it's so awkward to read), just a little more clarity on the time and place details would have helped. (It all made sense at the end once the narration actually told us they were in a bathroom, etc.)

Other than that minor quibble, I really liked the chapter. I like the fact that Naruto is refusing to give in to Sasuke, and yet Sasuke seems to be getting little concessions from him. I don't want Naruto to give in too quickly, since his stunted emotions are his big character flaw and it's interesting watching Sasuke helping him overcome that. Or at least TRYING to. I felt really bad for Sasuke when Naruto shot him down in such a mean way--normally in fics like this, Naruto + Sasuke's roles would be reversed and it would be Sasuke as the emotionally stunted playboy, so it's really nice to see the role reversal here. I also liked the fact that Sasuke would have willingly slept with one of those men in the club because he couldn't have Naruto, and that it wasn't some cheap jealousy ploy. (That's a much more realistic way for him to behave than if he was trying to play jealousy games with Naruto, which doesn't strike me as very Sasuke-like behavior anyway.)

BTW, when the fic said that Sasuke started hanging out with Naruto's friends Kiba and Iruka, I got all excited because I thought Kiba + Iruka were a couple. The possibility struck me as cute: older man Iruka x younger man Kiba. (Plus it's rare to see Iruka with anyone other than Kakashi.) LOL. I got all bummed when I realized they weren't together. :P

yep yep i remember that line from the show well. ooh brian

Yay! You updated this. :D I love this story so much. It's edgy and sexy and just plain awesome. Update again soon!~

I am admittedly a bit of a lurker, but I've read all of your work and thus far - this is my absolute favorite! I can't wait to see where this goes.

love this very kinky scene to it sasuke i think u def got your hands full lol