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Great update. Sorry for not commenting sooner. Forgive me? But I hope you update again soon please.

So happy to see an update from you! I know you've been busy with school, but I didn't mind waiting at all. And it was well worth the wait! This chapter was great, and like usual left me wanting more! I like the Naru/Sasu parts the best ;) but they are my bias anyway. Don't be discouraged with a lack of reviews right away...it happened to me as well with my stories. If you are gone for a little bit it sometimes takes readers a little while to leave feedback. Sorry I was late leaving you a review! But I can't wait for the next chapter! I check my FB every day to see if you've updated, haha.
Till next time!

so awesome to read more!!! I really like that Kisame dies. Served him right. And I like Naruto and Sasuke snuggling and Sasuke trying to protect Naruto. And Itachi and Kyuubi snuggling in Naruto's room and Itachi commenting on all the orange... sweet with a lghter moment. This chapter was balanced very well because it would have been too painful to read if it had been all about Naruto being beaten.

[ "You weren't supposed to." The raven was sure the other man could hear the pounding of his heart as he waited for the answer to the most important question yet. Kyuubi could be forgiven for concealing the truth from him if he truly did love him. It would be enough.

The car was silent for a moment before the LEAF agent drew a deep breath. "Yes," he whispered, eyes still focused intently on the road. ]

This part has a mistake that many struggle with. When Itachi asks with a negative, Kyuubi's answer should be negative too since I think you mean that he wasn't supposed to fall in love.
I know you made it into a statement kind of thing but still just one word answer should be in same form.
This is how it goes:
Q: You were supposed to fall in love with me?
A: Yes, I was./No, I was not.

Q: You were not supposed to fall in love with me?
A: No, I was not supposed to./ Yes, I was supposed to.

So I know you might not have noticed this but it really helps when you constract the whole sentence just to make it clear even for yourself that what is the right answer.

I know this probably sound like I am some kind of grammar freak but I just found this interesting. :) You are a good writer.

I'm reviewing to rage on the lack of chapter. Where is it!!!! I need my fix! So yes. There is my mini rage. Hope you enjoyed it.


P.S. UPDATE!!!!!!!

I love this story!!!! Please don't stop writing it. I log onto this story everyday waiting on a new chapter and I always read through it so fast I get a headache :) I really look forward to the next chapter. Btw I started crying when kabuto was torturing naruto, it was a really powerful scene.

Hey, I know all about how homework and classes can bring any form of creativity to a stand-still, so no worries. I actually thought you were having trouble writing this cause you didn't want to write the non-con, but I think you did a great job for what you had to work with. (shoves pins into a Kabuto-doll) >:) Can't wait for the next chapter, and I personally can't wait til Naruto makes good on his promise too!!

OMG!! That was such distressful reading but I'm glad Naruto isn't so broken that he can't explain to Sasuke what is really going which will give Sasuke understanding n hope to hang on til their rescue. That was really good. Sasuke has shown some excellent support skills. Hopefully he won't be too scarred after this ordeal n they'll obviously be closer to one another. I hope there is no other really hurtful form of torture later on for our Hero.

I am so happy to see another chapter up and as harsh and dark is was to read and how light headed it made me I am happy to see how strong both Naruto and Sasuke are even with the torture they both just went through. I can only imagine what will happen next and will cry with our two favorite guys and look forward to them pulling through it. Plus looking forward to Naruto getting topped by Sasuke is always a bonus....wicked grin!! Muwhhaaa

Oh how I've missed you! But I hope you're doing well in school(I feel like an aunt or something saying that).
I wanted to cry for Naruto.