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April 12, 2011 at 12:00 AM
This is such an awesome fic. I hope you update soon, because i am eager to read more!
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April 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
LOOOOVVEE this story! LOve it love it love it!I'm going to start your other one next... I've been saving it for when I had more time :)
Sasuke smelling like arrogance, insecurity and blood... that was an awesome description of him. And it's so cute how Naruto is kind of snuggly now.
Now do this...put your left thumb in your left ear, your right thumb in your right ear, stick out your tongue, wiggle your fingers, and go "naaaaaaa" That's for those giving you flack about your spelling/grammar lol.
Really you don't have much to worry about. A typo or word tense change here and there won't kill them and it doesn't detract from the story at all. Strong readers substitute naturally when they read and weak readers won't notice. So no worries!
chap. 3 just had 4 places where a wrong word was used which changed the meaning from what you meant. ie. When team Sasuke were putting their hoods up with the "paltry(inadequate) piece of cloth" not "poultry" (chicken). Just let me know if you want to bother with the others.
Till next chapter...write lots!!!! :)
Sasuke smelling like arrogance, insecurity and blood... that was an awesome description of him. And it's so cute how Naruto is kind of snuggly now.
Now do this...put your left thumb in your left ear, your right thumb in your right ear, stick out your tongue, wiggle your fingers, and go "naaaaaaa" That's for those giving you flack about your spelling/grammar lol.
Really you don't have much to worry about. A typo or word tense change here and there won't kill them and it doesn't detract from the story at all. Strong readers substitute naturally when they read and weak readers won't notice. So no worries!
chap. 3 just had 4 places where a wrong word was used which changed the meaning from what you meant. ie. When team Sasuke were putting their hoods up with the "paltry(inadequate) piece of cloth" not "poultry" (chicken). Just let me know if you want to bother with the others.
Till next chapter...write lots!!!! :)
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April 10, 2011 at 12:00 AM
x33 i love it!!
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April 10, 2011 at 12:00 AM
pretty good with picturing things in my head based on description! I loves this chapter! Hee hee something in me wonders if Naruto really wnts to rip Sasuke's throat out or not. I totlay could picture Kiba's victory dance and I LOVED his descriptionof Sasuke's scent. Awesome. Nice development with Neji being protective and Shikamaru cuddling Naruto kind of awesome. :) I really hope the next chapter is soon.
As for editing issues don't worry about it. I didn't see anything that made me stumble in the story. I've learned sometimes you just have to ignore some of the things said in feedback or else they'll eat you alive until you just can't post anymore. :( Sad but true... if the editing were REALLY that big of a deal, they'd stop reading. So buck up butter cup ;0p
As for editing issues don't worry about it. I didn't see anything that made me stumble in the story. I've learned sometimes you just have to ignore some of the things said in feedback or else they'll eat you alive until you just can't post anymore. :( Sad but true... if the editing were REALLY that big of a deal, they'd stop reading. So buck up butter cup ;0p
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April 10, 2011 at 12:00 AM
things should be getting fun now, neh?
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April 10, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story and I'm interested about where you will go with this. I also would like mpreg, if you decide to do it.
I'm only slightly doubtful about one aspect: the violent bullying of Naruto by other shinobi and civilians. I don't know how many of the events from canon you are keeping, but since Sasuke also attacked the Kage summit (as you mentioned), I'd think Naruto also defeated Pein. Correct me if I'm wrong there, but that episode seriously changed how the other shinobi and all civilians thought of Naruto in a very positive way (he was considered a hero and untouchable even by Danzo). And I don't think him sporting fox ears and a tail would bring such a radical change of heart from the population (like Kakashi said: they are shinobi and see weird things constantly - like Orochimaru for example). Plus, even before the Pein attack, shinobi and civilians had been getting better with Naruto because of his many achievements and most importantly they NEVER beat him like that, at least since he became a ninja; their bullying was more oral or through neglect (and shinobi must respect strict rules and can't beat up other shinobi - no matter what they think of them - without facing serious consequences. They are soldiers and are supposed to be sort of role models for the population). Of course you can choose that many of these things didn't happen in your story, but then it would mean that people are worse than in canon (which is already not very high in my opinion) and incapable of changing and evolving positively, which I find hard to believe and a bit depressing. Also, the way things are going, Naruto would have close to no chance of ever becoming Hokage because people can't seem to be able to move on from the past...
I hope you don't think I'm flaming or anything, because I truly like the story, but I just wanted to let you know of my perspective on this because it was bothering me a little. And we're always more critical with the things/people we like. I'm looking forward to another confrontation between Naruto and Sasuke away from prying eyes. I kind of expected Sasuke to have a nosebleed when seeing Naruto's new foxy figure (funny mental picture anyway)...
I'm only slightly doubtful about one aspect: the violent bullying of Naruto by other shinobi and civilians. I don't know how many of the events from canon you are keeping, but since Sasuke also attacked the Kage summit (as you mentioned), I'd think Naruto also defeated Pein. Correct me if I'm wrong there, but that episode seriously changed how the other shinobi and all civilians thought of Naruto in a very positive way (he was considered a hero and untouchable even by Danzo). And I don't think him sporting fox ears and a tail would bring such a radical change of heart from the population (like Kakashi said: they are shinobi and see weird things constantly - like Orochimaru for example). Plus, even before the Pein attack, shinobi and civilians had been getting better with Naruto because of his many achievements and most importantly they NEVER beat him like that, at least since he became a ninja; their bullying was more oral or through neglect (and shinobi must respect strict rules and can't beat up other shinobi - no matter what they think of them - without facing serious consequences. They are soldiers and are supposed to be sort of role models for the population). Of course you can choose that many of these things didn't happen in your story, but then it would mean that people are worse than in canon (which is already not very high in my opinion) and incapable of changing and evolving positively, which I find hard to believe and a bit depressing. Also, the way things are going, Naruto would have close to no chance of ever becoming Hokage because people can't seem to be able to move on from the past...
I hope you don't think I'm flaming or anything, because I truly like the story, but I just wanted to let you know of my perspective on this because it was bothering me a little. And we're always more critical with the things/people we like. I'm looking forward to another confrontation between Naruto and Sasuke away from prying eyes. I kind of expected Sasuke to have a nosebleed when seeing Naruto's new foxy figure (funny mental picture anyway)...
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March 9, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Hi there, I've just finished the first two chapters of your fanfiction 'Elemental Attraction'. First off I'd like to say I like it. Secondly, I hope you update soon, though I understand it is not at the forefront of your creative focus. Thirdly, I will certainly read your other fiction as I enjoy your style. It carries with it the gravity of what I know of Naruto (I've only watched the show, never read any manga). That is the light-heartedness and the underlying darker elements. I enjoy how closely it keeps with the original universe and the character's personalities. I've only recently started looking at Naruto fanfiction and was disappointed to see much of it set in AU or "high-school" fics. While I'm sure they have their place, and are probably a popular trend considering how long Naruto fanfiction has been written for, it was not what I was personally looking for in a fic. I also liked that it was very up-to-date with what is currently happening in the show and yet deviates just enough from the cannon plot for it to seem plausible yet still intriguing. A few points of recommendation however, I suggest you do a little proof reading before posting as there were a number of grammatical and spelling errors but that's nothing to be overly concerned about. In conclusion I'm really looking forward to the rest of this fic and how Naruto takes Sasuke's return!
Cheers,
Dyn
Cheers,
Dyn
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February 22, 2011 at 12:00 AM
OMG finish this it has the makings of a GREAT story just the type that I like and the tail and ears tooooo cute me likes very mucho!!!!!!!
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February 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Wow. Your review response cracked me up. Just had to say that.
Even without fully knowing the outcome of the series, I love when authors ad lib and write something a little new for us. I'm looking forward to more and Sasuke's plans with his return.
And this fic would be called EA.
Even without fully knowing the outcome of the series, I love when authors ad lib and write something a little new for us. I'm looking forward to more and Sasuke's plans with his return.
And this fic would be called EA.
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February 15, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Interesting story, and Naruto with fox ears and tail must be pretty cute!
I hope Sasuke gets rid of Danzo - he's just too creepy and unreliable.
Also, with all the references to parenting for Sasuke, is this going to be mpreg? I wouldn't mind at all, but you might want to clarify that in the warnings if it is, because it's not to everybody's tastes... And if it is not, will Sasuke be with Naruto but still marry a woman?
I hope Sasuke gets rid of Danzo - he's just too creepy and unreliable.
Also, with all the references to parenting for Sasuke, is this going to be mpreg? I wouldn't mind at all, but you might want to clarify that in the warnings if it is, because it's not to everybody's tastes... And if it is not, will Sasuke be with Naruto but still marry a woman?