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So, just popping in again, here's a to-do list for you.

1) learn grammar and capitalization rules. You get it both right and wrong several times, but it's wrong 90% of the time

2) "-kun" is only used for other guys. If you claim to have read the manga or watched the anime, I don't think that there's much any way for you to not know that Naruto calls Sakura "Sakura-chan"

omg....... ^o^ i think im gonna die of happiness now

kun is a male honerific,, unless you are saying that she is takeing the male and/or dominite role in this

and that is informal to the point of being almost slang


as a suggestion make an extension were naruto returns the favor

Lol, "ino yamagi"? Don't you mean, Ino Yamanaka?

Okay, I'm done. And despite the grammatical errors and the terrible misspelling of names (ino yagawa?) I have to say, OH MY GOD this was sooooooo HOT. I mean, really, I only read het if it's real good and threesomes are always a treat, but you blew my mind with this. Very sexy and you have much potential, my friend. I usually clam up and stop reading at the sight of so many errors and typos but the plot, the action, the smexyness was just so good I forgot all about it. Not many people can do that. You have talent, that's for damn sure. Keep it, and I know you'll only get better, though you're already pretty awesome.

Mega kudos.

you dropped the last of the main scene too early, then to offer up a chapter two...

more please.