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Dang it! I'm behind! That was an unexpected, pleasant discovery. Now Sasuke can get explanations. I'm so excited about reading the next chapter!!x3

Wow!! That was an exciting chapter!! I loved the way u described Naruto with a smooth rumbling voice. I love OOCness. I sure do wish this was MPreg with Sasuke lol. I can't wait for Itachi's reaction to what's going on. This is going to be so good.:d

Wow, I like where you're going with this. The characters are expressed well, you use enough description to get the point across without going overboard, and the plot itself is interesting and unique. But, I must say, the way you write is kind of difficult for me to enjoy because there's this... sarcasm to it, even in parts that aren't supposed to be funny, and it sort of comes off as if you don't really believe what you're writing. Well, that makes it hard for me to believe it, too, and it all just starts sounding like a joke rather than a serious attempt at fantasy and suspense. I'm sorry if that comes off as harsh, but you seem like the kind of person who can take criticism and actually improve rather than get offended so I figure you can handle it. I look forward to more of your writing!

Well that was really an "oh shi--" cliffhanger. I like the fact that Sasuke has noticed that Naruto is attractive, but he's far more concerned about his safety and getting away. Given how bizarre the situation is, it would be ridiculous if he easily gave in to what Naruto wants. And then of course there's Itachi, who absolutely won't be OK with what Naruto wants.

Hmmm... so what approach will Naruto take in order to get Sasuke to mate with him? He could try the blackmail approach--"I'll let you and your brother leave IF..."--or he could try seducing him in his own obsessively creepy Naruto-ish way (showing up at odd times? bringing him strange gifts?), or maybe he'll be the confident type and just let Sasuke go while telling him he knows Sasuke will eventually come back to him on his own. This Naruto seems smart, confident, and cunning, so the last two seem more of a possibility to me than the first. It's interesting that Naruto knew Sasuke's full name. Makes me think this definitely wasn't a spur of the moment thing and that he might have been planning this for a bit. On the other hand, Sasuke and Itachi did just move into town, so Sasuke couldn't have caught Naruto's attention for all that long. I'll be interested to hear Naruto's explanation for how he found Sasuke next chapter (and of course see Itachi's reaction when he wakes up, LOL.)

Ha... Itachi's passed out on the ground and Naruto is practically propositioning Sasuke. That's so awesome. It's already obvious that Sasuke is attracted to Naruto, so it remains to be seen if Sasuke is going to make it difficult for the him or not. And what are they going to do with poor Itachi? Will Naruto let Sasuke take him back with a promise to return, or will Itachi have to wait until he's well enought to move on his own.

Well I'm hooked, please continue.

Now see kiddies, this is why your mommie tells you not to go out and play in the woods at night!!!!!!! ;) this is getting good!! Naruto went out and got him a playmate!!!

That was good!!! Very very fun to read! I really loved the part where Sasuke said he had to get out of there because he didn't know how much of his own insults he could take.I forget right now how you phrased that but it was really funny. And I love what Naruto says at the end about wanting Sasuke to be his mate. The way he says it is almost formal. The flow and pacing of this is really good too. Be inspired to write lots!

Totally love the firts second and now third chapter!!!!! Need more! O.o

Fantastic! I haven't read such a well written Naruto adventure/mystery fan fiction in a while. Totally love how you started the story and are building more suspense with each chapter. While it was hilarious how Itachi was pranking Sasuke, I totally felt Sasuke`s irritation with Itachi. You have uncanny ability to portray characters` emotion while maintaining their originality.
After reading Naruto`s transformation, I can’t wait to read the next chapter to find out what exactly he is. Hope you won’t take too long to update.
KN.

Wow is Naruto some kind of werefox? It seems that he can not control when he shiftes and when not!! Poor guy!!!! I so can't wait for him to wake up and to meet the brother!!! Thank you for the fast post!!! See you!!!