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for When A Heart Cracks

by SirGeneralSir

person solitare1
schedule September 20, 2016 at 12:00 AM

I have enjoyed this story so much that I read it twice. I hope you are feeling better and give us the rest of this story soon. Loved the part where kiba got his ass handed to him!😂 looking forward to seeing the next chapter soon.

person solitare1
schedule September 7, 2016 at 12:00 AM

I can't wait for more of this story It is an excellent story and It has a lot of depth And a lot of feelingsI just can't wait for more I have read this story twice now I read it while you were writing it and I read it just now From beginning to end It takes a really good story to make me have to read it twice.

person Knightblazer
schedule September 1, 2016 at 12:00 AM

Miss reading this great story hope more come soon....Love the whole idea 

person solitare1
schedule June 17, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Absolutely love this story! Wish you could do more chapters at a time but I'll take what I can get and be glad to get it!
person Knightblazer
schedule June 16, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter hope to read more soon so few good ones at the moment....
person Knightblazer
schedule May 19, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Great to have your writing back hope to read more soon...Awesome chapter
schedule December 2, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Okay. There are quite a few grammatical errors but it's nothing distracting so don't worry about those.

First. I absolutely love the Dragon village and the deep background story you gave. It's completely believable and well fleshed out.

Second. I am 100% enjoying this. It's well thought out and paced well. It's keeps you interested and coming back for more.

Third. The concept of Naruto hiding his true self is so believable. While I prefer the thought that he is truly just that sweet and kind logically it's not realistic that a person could endure the kind of abuse that he did and not become jaded and resentful.

Fourth. This is just a personal preference. Overall this is a story based fic not a smut fic. Consequently the use of terms like pussy and dick seem a little out of place. For me at least it pulled me out a bit. Because they seemed a bit crass compared to the tone of the rest of the fic.

Fifth. A question. When Naruto was poisoned he was in so much pain he couldn't even properly dress himself. But then he's training and kicking ass with taijutsu. Did I miss read something? I don't quite understand how he couldn't dress himself but then go and do intense training.

Lastly. I was quite drawn in by this. Your story and characterizations are wonderful. I very much look forward to reading more. I'd also love your thoughts on my fic if you're willing. Provided you don't mind yaoi. Thanks again for hours of enjoyment!
person rose
schedule November 30, 2015 at 12:00 AM
next chapter please
schedule July 24, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Holy shit! I can review from the tablet tonight!

Well, we already discussed the sakura bashing thing last night. If you want a beta, you can ask. I just suck at fixing run on sentences.

Anyway, I'm enjoying the story. It's nice to find something with a plot instead of just sex
schedule July 11, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Excellent beginning! I must say I enjoyed the graphic end to Sasuke. I'm fascinated by the Dragon clan at the end...very nice!