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April 25, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Yes! Please continue. I like this.
To answer your questions, the head of the LAPD is the Chief of Police. And, no, you don't have to feel guilty about unleashing a serial killer on LA. He'll fit right in, glitter and all.
To answer your questions, the head of the LAPD is the Chief of Police. And, no, you don't have to feel guilty about unleashing a serial killer on LA. He'll fit right in, glitter and all.
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April 25, 2011 at 12:00 AM
This looks great. You really should continue if for no one else but yourself. Found this to help with titles if your worried about accuracy. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Police_rank
I'm sure you can look up the FBI the same way. Good luck. I'll continue to read.
I'm sure you can look up the FBI the same way. Good luck. I'll continue to read.
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April 25, 2011 at 12:00 AM
pretty good im definitely curious
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April 25, 2011 at 12:00 AM
sorry to lazy to log in, but
yes yes and hell yes....you should continue this little gem!!!!!
can i ask if this will be sasunaru kakairu? or is it kakasasu? i don't read kakasasu, but this is a good story line and i really would like to continue reading about the murders and all that it sounds like a good beginning, even if i have to put up with kakasasu.
I just can't imagine the father figure kakashi trying to get it on with his student at all..so that is why i don't read any kakasasu stories. so i'm kind of crossing my fingers hoping this is a sasunaru. thanks for sharing your story with us.
yes yes and hell yes....you should continue this little gem!!!!!
can i ask if this will be sasunaru kakairu? or is it kakasasu? i don't read kakasasu, but this is a good story line and i really would like to continue reading about the murders and all that it sounds like a good beginning, even if i have to put up with kakasasu.
I just can't imagine the father figure kakashi trying to get it on with his student at all..so that is why i don't read any kakasasu stories. so i'm kind of crossing my fingers hoping this is a sasunaru. thanks for sharing your story with us.
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April 25, 2011 at 12:00 AM
This is definitely worth continuing. The plot is really creative and unique.I like how you named the different "establishments" according to villages. XD So who is getting paired with who? Sasuke and Naruto? Kakashi and Naruto? Or will it just be one big orgy? XD I really hope you add more chapters.
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April 25, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Each precinct has is own captain and the Chief of Police is someone who is appointed by the mayor of the city and is over all of the various precincts. In a city as large as Los Angeles there is definitely the possiblity of a serial killer. Not that the size of the town really matters because serial killers have been found in cities of all sizes and from a variety of backgrounds. As for L.A. itself... it is not just one city anymore. The urban sprawl (when a city spreads beyond its borders) has taken over many of the smaller areas around it so people say where in L.A. do you live and they could give several answers.
Please do continue. I am curious to see where it leads.
Please do continue. I am curious to see where it leads.
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April 25, 2011 at 12:00 AM
You've already gotten a lot of good info from on the people on the police/FBI side of things, so all I'll add is that the FBI only gets involved in cases that cross state lines, otherwise it's a local matter and they have no jurisdiction unless their help is specifically requested. (The CIA is for international matters and wouldn't get involved at all.) I'm a native to this side of the country, so let me add in what I know about LA serial killers, in case it's of help to you:
There have actually been a couple of infamous serial killers that used the LA area as their hunting grounds, but the best known one is Richard Ramirez, AKA "The Night Stalker." If you have any curiosity on it, his wikipedia page is here:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Richard_Ramirez
The case was pretty sensationalistic because Ramirez made comments about satanism (leading people to worry that he was a satanist) and he was apparently obsessed with the band AC/DC, especially their song "Night Prowler"--I think it was something of an inspiration for his killings. In addition, the killings themselves were terribly gruesome.
Another infamous one was the "Westside Rapist":
http://www.gazettenet.com/2011/04/02/la-serial-killer-gets-life-term
And a recently identified (and captured!) serial killer is the "Grim Sleeper":
http://www.thedailybeast.com/blogs-and-stories/2010-11-12/a-serial-killer-on-the-loose-in-la/
http://articles.cnn.com/2010-07-07/justice/grim.sleeper.arrest_1_lonnie-david-franklin-serial-killer-case-family-members?_s=PM:CRIME
The "Grim Sleeper" case is interesting for lots of reasons (can you tell how much I like "True Crime" stuff?!) It took both DNA for them to realize there was a serial killer in the first place (the guy would apparently wait years and years in between kills), but they also used DNA in a really cool way to catch the guy.
So! Hope that was helpful to you. :)
As for the story, obviously, it's the sort of thing I like. Although you said you don't know much about the US/LA, I didn't get the impression that you had no clue what you were talking about as I read the chapter, so you did a good job with creating the kind of seedy environment Kakashi and Sasuke would be investigating (though seedy bars and clubs are a pretty universal thing no matter where you live, I'd guess!) I like the characters in this. A serious Sasuke who yearns for a quiet life out in nature is a nice change of pace from the normal ultra-ambitious Sasuke who usually detests small towns. It's also a nice change of pace that Kakashi currently has a thing with Ibiki instead of the usual Iruka (although he might be attracted to Iruka). Now I'm waiting to see if Naruto will show up and what role he'll be playing. I could see him as a prostitute, but I could also see him as one of the local investigating police officers (that Kakashi & Sasuke assume bungled the job). ^_^
There have actually been a couple of infamous serial killers that used the LA area as their hunting grounds, but the best known one is Richard Ramirez, AKA "The Night Stalker." If you have any curiosity on it, his wikipedia page is here:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Richard_Ramirez
The case was pretty sensationalistic because Ramirez made comments about satanism (leading people to worry that he was a satanist) and he was apparently obsessed with the band AC/DC, especially their song "Night Prowler"--I think it was something of an inspiration for his killings. In addition, the killings themselves were terribly gruesome.
Another infamous one was the "Westside Rapist":
http://www.gazettenet.com/2011/04/02/la-serial-killer-gets-life-term
And a recently identified (and captured!) serial killer is the "Grim Sleeper":
http://www.thedailybeast.com/blogs-and-stories/2010-11-12/a-serial-killer-on-the-loose-in-la/
http://articles.cnn.com/2010-07-07/justice/grim.sleeper.arrest_1_lonnie-david-franklin-serial-killer-case-family-members?_s=PM:CRIME
The "Grim Sleeper" case is interesting for lots of reasons (can you tell how much I like "True Crime" stuff?!) It took both DNA for them to realize there was a serial killer in the first place (the guy would apparently wait years and years in between kills), but they also used DNA in a really cool way to catch the guy.
So! Hope that was helpful to you. :)
As for the story, obviously, it's the sort of thing I like. Although you said you don't know much about the US/LA, I didn't get the impression that you had no clue what you were talking about as I read the chapter, so you did a good job with creating the kind of seedy environment Kakashi and Sasuke would be investigating (though seedy bars and clubs are a pretty universal thing no matter where you live, I'd guess!) I like the characters in this. A serious Sasuke who yearns for a quiet life out in nature is a nice change of pace from the normal ultra-ambitious Sasuke who usually detests small towns. It's also a nice change of pace that Kakashi currently has a thing with Ibiki instead of the usual Iruka (although he might be attracted to Iruka). Now I'm waiting to see if Naruto will show up and what role he'll be playing. I could see him as a prostitute, but I could also see him as one of the local investigating police officers (that Kakashi & Sasuke assume bungled the job). ^_^
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April 25, 2011 at 12:00 AM
GAH. I wish you could edit reviews. One thing I meant to add: The FBI doesn't actually take over investigations. They work in conjunction with other law enforcement agencies sharing info/resources, etc. Strictly speaking, Kakashi and Sasuke probably should have checked in with the local police first before going to speak with Tsunade. Have another link: http://www.fbi.gov/stats-services/research/
OK, going away now, I promise. ^_^;
OK, going away now, I promise. ^_^;