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I like your story please continue.

Awwww, I liked that update but it felt like such a tease! I need more!

Okay! So wow! I have a bit conflicting feelings triggered by this chapter.

One is the utter loneliness. Reading the whole thing, including the prequel, tossed me back into this world, this mood, and while I wasn't exactly happy to begin with, reading Naruto decide to be helpful but not to disturb them more than necessary threw me off a cliff... - but this is more from the previous chapter.

The other is a massive collection of Naruto teasing the guys and pulling them in like a siren/merman :D... Like flitting across the room in almost nothing, swaying his hips, and the guys drooling.... (I have to admit, my imagination ran away, and gone as far as showing him 'handle his problem' lying on a couch and, well, pretty much giving a show to Shika and Neji...)

I wonder how they'll bear this... or will they talk it out? Or just how it'll go from here... :)

I was really tuned to Shika when reading the Sai-part... yeah... feeling like strangling the little shit!

And I just loved Asuma, and Raido! Hope they'll have some more part in the future. :)

I guess this is all for now - and I hope poor Naru'll get some loving soon - and we get to know some of his past too. :) Thanks for writing this chapter! I really enjoyed it!

Ohhhh what a tease of a chapter! Left me craving more! And let me say I've never enjoyed the line "infected by the gay" before today lol.

Wow, even thought we haven't hit any hardcore sex scenes in the story I am still loving it :) I hope to see more soon!

Daaaaammmmn!!! I wish there were more!!! I'm really curious now! How will their relationship progress? Will they get to know about Izumo? And actually will we see them here? I hope Sai'll get some damage for being like this! And I wanna se what happens to the other yakuza members, and see Neji or Shika snap, and start some fun, and hiw yummy it'll become when they realize just how good the blond is in bed, and how much stamina he has! - or should I call it renewing ability? Both of them would have their hands full just with one Naruto! I just can't wait! Great story!

Thanks!

That was such a fun chapter to read!!!! Loved it!!! And Raido? hmmm... is the trio going to include a quad? lol

I very strongly approve of Chapter 5, if only because I was picturing Sai as the Warden from a show titled "Superjail." It was highly entertaining to combine the physical features of Sai with those of the Warden, a crazy, eccentric characer from a crazy, surreal animated series. I strongly suggest that everyone do it, in fact, to make this chapter even more funny than it would be without the vision. (Of course, you might have to watch Superjail to be able to do this seamlessly.)

My own imaginative musings aside, I've been following this story for a while and approve of the general plot. However, as I'm sure you're aware, the whole "stay inside the house" thing has the entire story moving along at an almost painfully slow pace. I can infer that you're doing this purposely so that a sudden closeness between Naruto and his "captors" doesn't seem too strange or misplaced, but some of it does seem like filler. Then again, any part of a story can seem like filler until the author calls upon the information or elaborates later on in the story.

I've also noticed a few grammatical errors, but none of them are in the red zone. You two certainly have better grammar than a filling slice of the authors around here. Besides that, nobody's perfect, and commas can be a bit of a pain in the ass. They're like grammar's unloved stepchild.

Please keep writing. I'm looking forward to seeing what you plan to do with this story in the future.

lol mt. fugi... I really liked this chapter. I like hearing what Neji is thinking and how both him and Shika look forward to going home to their little bird

*raises hand* Can Asuma be my bodyguard too?!