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this looks very promising and i love the plot idea so far. my only fear is that it turns into a happy every after-story á la disney. i like the more subdued, gloomy and dark fics better. keep it up and update soon.

This is a really interesting take. I have so many questions in regards to Naruto, but the one that I really want to know is what drove him to make that decision? As for Sasuke, he seems so detached and uncaring...I really look forward to how you will be developing both characters. I was a really nice touch to show the contrast between the past Naruto and the present Naruto. I am also interested to see how Itachi will adapt to this.

great start! i like dark narusasu! i am looking forward for the next chapter!!

I think FromAfar makes a good point about Sasuke: the story has framed him as being an awful jerk that we're supposed to dislike, but it seems like his personality is a result of all the pressure he was under growing up, so I can't exactly fault him for that. Under different circumstances, he might have grown up to be a more pleasant person. However, for his own self-preservation, it seems as though he HAD to turn into the kind of person who could cut his ties with his family; otherwise, he would have continued to live under the crushing weight of his father's expectations and the shadow of his older brother. (If he was already well-aware of those expectations by the time he was 11, you can imagine what it must have been like for him growing up.)

Of course you can blame him for how unfair his escape was to Naruto and Itachi, but it wouldn't have been an escape from his family if he didn't cut ties with all of his immediate family, and unfortunately that includes his brothers. The fact that things went wrong with his two brothers after he left, well, that's entirely their own faults. No one forced Naruto to attempt suicide, and no one forced Itachi to neglect Naruto (trying to save the company isn't a good enough excuse, quite frankly. If he had enough time for parties and a girlfriend, he should have had enough time for Naruto).

I guess what I'm saying is, the tone of the story so far is painting Naruto and Itachi as the victims and Sasuke almost as the villain (i.e., all the narrative comments that call him cold, selfish, etc. However, his actions tell us all we need to know about his personality without the extra commentary), but there are good reasons to sympathize with all three characters, and good reasons to dislike them all as well. I feel like the story could be even more emotionally gripping if we were allowed to sympathize with Sasuke more, and to dislike Naruto and Itachi more. (This isn't really a case where there should be good guys and bad guys, you know? It's a case where there's an entire dysfunctional family.)

Ah, and finally, I know you were only joking around about not wanting to work on the next chapter of this until you got X number of reviews, but seriously, you shouldn't say stuff like that because it annoys people and makes them not want to review rather than encouraging them.

i like it. please update. what happen to happy naru to be such emotionally disturbed individual.

This story has blown me away so far. The plot is quite original and intriguing; I think it will develop into a wonderful story down the road. The characters are fantastic and rather canon like. I especially love the way you described Kyuubi as a female, because in the series Kyuubi actually is female, so bonus points to you on that. xD All in all, this looks like a moving and promising story and I hope for you to continue it soon.