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June 30, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Sorry for taking so long to get back to you about your question concerning my review - I have been on a completely different fandom kick and am just now getting back to Naruto. Sad, right? In my review I did not mean that Kakashi knew Naruto through his mother. I meant that as the 4th's apprentice and friend (according to canon) he would have known both Minato and Kushina and it is therefore logical to believe that he knew some things about her.
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May 22, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I'm loving this story! I hope you update this story soon, keep up the good work!
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February 4, 2013 at 12:00 AM
ch 1
So cute xx
So cute xx
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March 5, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I stumbled onto this one and am impressed with it so far. So far..Hinata and Shippou huh? Kiba going to be in that as well? I wonder who else?
I wouldn't mind seeing Gaara with him..he's one of my faves.
I wouldn't mind seeing Gaara with him..he's one of my faves.
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March 4, 2012 at 12:00 AM
way to combine awesome anime/manga series. ^^
i wonder who the green beasts of konoha are descended from. :D
Watch your spelling and word meanings though.
i wonder who the green beasts of konoha are descended from. :D
Watch your spelling and word meanings though.
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November 26, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I can't wait to see where this story goes.
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October 22, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Please continue your soty, it's gotten really good and I like the story line you have created. I Love NaruHina pairings though i still like NaruYaoi more but if i see him with a girl Hinata is my first choice always. Hope you continue.
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August 21, 2011 at 12:00 AM
So far I am liking the story a lot. I am liking that you are developing Naruto as a person and not just portraying him as a lucky idiot. And I am very much looking foward to the next chapter!
I just have a few things to point out (and feel free to ignore me). First of all, co-collaborate is redundant because collaborate means to work woth someone else on a project (that is why the word starts with 'co') and spelling is an issue through the whole story so far - it is not serious or horrible, but is noticable and a little distracting. I would recommend a beta. Secondly, it should be a village-wide announcement (not village-wise) meaning encompassing the entire village. You repeatedly used the word 'proff' (it is spelled proof). You also confused quite and quiet. You used quiet (which means lack of noise) when the word you were looking for was quite (meaning complete or completely) as in 'are you quite finished nitpicking my story?' lol
Other than that I have two things I am confused about. The first is why wouldn't Kakashi have known about Naruto's heritage (I mean on his mother's side - I am assuming he knew and was sworn to secrecy about his father) or been able to get into the Namikaze compound seeing as he was on a team under Minato and was his personal friend? The second concerns the pictures you said were on the wall. You said Kushina was forced into early labor at eight and a half months when Kyuubi attacked so Naruto was born and she died that same night. We also know that Kyuubi was sealed in Naruto that same night by his father who sacrificed his life doing so. Having said all that- how are there baby pictures of Naruto up on the walls in the family home? Much less ones from before the Kyuubi was sealed in him? There would have been no one to take them and even if there were then there would be no way to put them in the house.
Anyway- I am sorry if this comes off as rude or pushy or anything like that. I do genuinely like your story and hope to read more of it- I just was getting bugged by the inconsistancies.
I just have a few things to point out (and feel free to ignore me). First of all, co-collaborate is redundant because collaborate means to work woth someone else on a project (that is why the word starts with 'co') and spelling is an issue through the whole story so far - it is not serious or horrible, but is noticable and a little distracting. I would recommend a beta. Secondly, it should be a village-wide announcement (not village-wise) meaning encompassing the entire village. You repeatedly used the word 'proff' (it is spelled proof). You also confused quite and quiet. You used quiet (which means lack of noise) when the word you were looking for was quite (meaning complete or completely) as in 'are you quite finished nitpicking my story?' lol
Other than that I have two things I am confused about. The first is why wouldn't Kakashi have known about Naruto's heritage (I mean on his mother's side - I am assuming he knew and was sworn to secrecy about his father) or been able to get into the Namikaze compound seeing as he was on a team under Minato and was his personal friend? The second concerns the pictures you said were on the wall. You said Kushina was forced into early labor at eight and a half months when Kyuubi attacked so Naruto was born and she died that same night. We also know that Kyuubi was sealed in Naruto that same night by his father who sacrificed his life doing so. Having said all that- how are there baby pictures of Naruto up on the walls in the family home? Much less ones from before the Kyuubi was sealed in him? There would have been no one to take them and even if there were then there would be no way to put them in the house.
Anyway- I am sorry if this comes off as rude or pushy or anything like that. I do genuinely like your story and hope to read more of it- I just was getting bugged by the inconsistancies.
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August 8, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I like where this story is going. You have great potential. I hope to see the next chapter posted soon.
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August 5, 2011 at 12:00 AM
That was a great first chapter. You managed to put a lot of background information in as well.