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That was awsome! I love it =) Keep it up

enjoying this. Great fic.

Now I'm so anxious for the next chapter

Love it.. please continue writing this story .. <3

I love the 'yeah, that's right bitch' glare. It's so Sasuke!

Please keep going, I am enjoying this!

Good job on your first fanfic! I like Naruto's relationship with his fellow cops and I like that the Uchihas seem pretty scummy. They definitely aren't drug deals with a heart or any other unrealistic thing like that! The only thing I don't like about the story is that Naruto and Sasuke seem a little too hormone-driven. If they were dumb kids in high school, it wouldn't be a big deal for Sasuke to chase Naruto the way he has, but they are adults in dangerous professions, they can't afford to act the way they have been so far. Getting background info on Naruto, following him to a club, Sasuke would definitely know better, no matter how much he might want Naruto. (Getting involved with a cop could bring down Sasuke's whole family and get Naruto killed.)

About the writing, I have one small suggestion: avoid using Japanese in your fics except for honorifics like -san, -kun, etc. (I saw a couple of "nani"s, etc.) It doesn't bother me all that much, but the use of random Japanese in fics is something a lot of people seem to dislike.