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Well I am hopeing to see if Sasuke and Naruto will start getting closer together more romatically. But I suppose that takes time. Hope to see antoher update soon please.

I've only read the prologue because I was just taking a break between my own writing to relax, but I will be back to read the rest! This is really your first story?? Your writing is very good! I especially like how in-character they all are and the flow and rhythm is really great. It pulled me along and within two lines I was hooked. I'm actually a little sad that I can't read the rest of the posted chapters right now! But...I don't normally read unfinished stories, so a part of me is hoping it won't take long for you to finish. Though it's so good that I'll probably end up giving in and reading it as fast as I can because I enjoyed it that much (really, my ultimate compliment). A+ for characterization, flow, style, vocabulary, and overall narrative quality, as well as using elements of the canon story line! Thanks for writing it!

You're welcome! ^^ And btw I really like this chapter, you've really really got Naruto's character down :) I think the word I'd use to describe Sasuke's and Naruto's relationship would be "bittersweet"

h,.
its developing quite nicely.
i cant wait for more.
so update soon.

~Golden Kitsune~

I didn't feel like logging on.. hehe.. but I felt like reviewing so here it is!

I like how this story is going, I read it in no time! Now you got me wondering about this new jutsu..!

Keep up with the writing!

You are getting better in your writing. You really are. Please keep updating, and I will keep on reviewing. ^_^

wow, this will radically alter how things fall out. Sooooooooooo many possibilities. Just think, if Sas can tap the fox and Naru can do the Sharingan... with fox regeneration, Naru's eyes won't fail and it may even carry over to to Sas. Though, I'm still hoping Naru can help those he does in the canon, lika Gaara, Hinata and stuff.
Anyway, this has the makings of being epic, just let them get to powerful to quickly or smoothly. They got stronger with training and struggle and determination/drive.

You're awesome ^^ I love your story-line! Very intriguing!

ahhhh... I think Sasuke isn't as straight as Naruto thinks... he all but dared Naruto to carry out the kiss. I like how this is starting out. Interesting story idea.

A few typos here and there but nothing major. Typing it on word and then spell/grammar checking it first would take care of some of them.

Looking forward to reading more.

I think this story is cute. Please do continue! There were a few grammatical errors especially in the latest chapter but it's nothing major--just spell check it on Word :) Anyway I'll be looking out for the next update!