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January 12, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I like it very much!!!But I'll also like to see the next chapter T.T It's interesting^^
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November 9, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I agree with G... don't know what people had a problem with on FF but I liked the ending. Sasuke got a clue... realized that the one always there for him was Naruto... and that whole Kiba and Neji thing was funny... like love potion number 9 funny... I liked it :)
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November 8, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I liked this and if it had an unhappy ending then I am glad you are rewriting it. It was fun and flirty to read and I look forward to more of the story.
I do strongly suggest that you get a beta for it though. There were a few places that even I had to stop to figure out which word you meant and I'm a pro at reading things easily regardless of spelling or grammar errors.
I do strongly suggest that you get a beta for it though. There were a few places that even I had to stop to figure out which word you meant and I'm a pro at reading things easily regardless of spelling or grammar errors.
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November 5, 2011 at 12:00 AM
If you have permission to rewrite the ending, then go whole hog with it and get the fic beta'd. It needs it. Badly. I feel like there's a cute fic here hiding under the spelling mistakes and bad grammar, but it's hard to read as-is.
As for the original ending (I went & checked the story out on ff.net), I actually liked it. I don't think you need to change it, just explain Naruto and Sasuke's feelings in the end more. (Well, Sasuke's really.) It wasn't clear what kind of relationship the boys decided to have in the end. I wasn't sure if Sasuke's feelings for Naruto had changed or stayed the same. If Sasuke's feelings did change, I wasn't sure why that had happened. (Did he always like Naruto, or was Sasuke like Kiba and Neji who liked non-pervert Naruto better that pervert Naruto? Sasuke should be better than that!)
As for the original ending (I went & checked the story out on ff.net), I actually liked it. I don't think you need to change it, just explain Naruto and Sasuke's feelings in the end more. (Well, Sasuke's really.) It wasn't clear what kind of relationship the boys decided to have in the end. I wasn't sure if Sasuke's feelings for Naruto had changed or stayed the same. If Sasuke's feelings did change, I wasn't sure why that had happened. (Did he always like Naruto, or was Sasuke like Kiba and Neji who liked non-pervert Naruto better that pervert Naruto? Sasuke should be better than that!)