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November 27, 2015 at 12:00 AM
such a wonderful story.
wonder if this will stay uncompleted for a long a time
i really wanna know what will happen to naru-chan.
wonder if this will stay uncompleted for a long a time
i really wanna know what will happen to naru-chan.
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June 21, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Gosh! It's interesting! So please continue this story okay? <3
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February 27, 2012 at 12:00 AM
A very confusing story, really..
One thing I disliked from the beginning is that it's VERY clear that Naruto's innocent. Where's the intrigue in it?
As I see it, Sasuke seems to be doing a good job as a Hokage, chosen by his people. But in the same time, he is hated by Naruto as he had "stolen" his dream.Sasuke loves Naruto and does everything he can to save him or buy the time. And Naruto despises him and clearly didn't forgive anything of his past mistakes..
A bunch of ordinary genin seems to know practically *all* of Konoha secrets..:)) Is it possible? Names of ANBUs? You kidding me, it's classified info, they aren't supposed to know so much and the enemies must have been very well aware of it. Naruto himself isn't supposed to know it. So HOW can they trust this info, then?..
Naruto's a "father figure' for his genins and was supposed, meant to be the next Hokage.. OK, but what a good nin gets caught and raped in the centre of an enemy village? Where had he been while they were torturing them? What about his extra-super-abilities? Like Sennin Regime? Kage Bunshin would have been enough to rescue everyone! Either this Naruto is VERY OOC, or he *simply doesn't deserve* the title of Hokage - the strongest nin of his or her village..
And how could Naruto just *let* Sasuke to steal his dream? Did he try or fight for it to the end?? He just blames everything on Sasuke.
Why wasn't Naruto healed immediately after the rape? Strange..
And what is all this twisted thrill about fucking or raping a Kyuubi-vessel? Overpowering him can be considered as a feat, yes, but the rest.. Naruto's body is just a body, he's not very strong in your story, so.. what's big deal in raping him? OK, I get it, you just like to victimize Naruto in any way possible.. a gangrape, undesirable pregnancy later, a stolen dream, injured children under his care, etc etc... but isn't it too much? You really believe Naruto would have just let it happen to himself?
I think in your strange story Sasuke and Naruto changed places, but not only as a Hokage and a nin. Naruto pities himself and passively blames his enemy instead of doing anything for his own sake.
One more thing: why do you describe characters using their eye color only? Zircon-obsidian-chocolate-teal-green.. plus their hair color. Isn't it a bit too.. primitive?
Good luck with the story. Hope next chapters will be better and clear up something for me.
One thing I disliked from the beginning is that it's VERY clear that Naruto's innocent. Where's the intrigue in it?
As I see it, Sasuke seems to be doing a good job as a Hokage, chosen by his people. But in the same time, he is hated by Naruto as he had "stolen" his dream.Sasuke loves Naruto and does everything he can to save him or buy the time. And Naruto despises him and clearly didn't forgive anything of his past mistakes..
A bunch of ordinary genin seems to know practically *all* of Konoha secrets..:)) Is it possible? Names of ANBUs? You kidding me, it's classified info, they aren't supposed to know so much and the enemies must have been very well aware of it. Naruto himself isn't supposed to know it. So HOW can they trust this info, then?..
Naruto's a "father figure' for his genins and was supposed, meant to be the next Hokage.. OK, but what a good nin gets caught and raped in the centre of an enemy village? Where had he been while they were torturing them? What about his extra-super-abilities? Like Sennin Regime? Kage Bunshin would have been enough to rescue everyone! Either this Naruto is VERY OOC, or he *simply doesn't deserve* the title of Hokage - the strongest nin of his or her village..
And how could Naruto just *let* Sasuke to steal his dream? Did he try or fight for it to the end?? He just blames everything on Sasuke.
Why wasn't Naruto healed immediately after the rape? Strange..
And what is all this twisted thrill about fucking or raping a Kyuubi-vessel? Overpowering him can be considered as a feat, yes, but the rest.. Naruto's body is just a body, he's not very strong in your story, so.. what's big deal in raping him? OK, I get it, you just like to victimize Naruto in any way possible.. a gangrape, undesirable pregnancy later, a stolen dream, injured children under his care, etc etc... but isn't it too much? You really believe Naruto would have just let it happen to himself?
I think in your strange story Sasuke and Naruto changed places, but not only as a Hokage and a nin. Naruto pities himself and passively blames his enemy instead of doing anything for his own sake.
One more thing: why do you describe characters using their eye color only? Zircon-obsidian-chocolate-teal-green.. plus their hair color. Isn't it a bit too.. primitive?
Good luck with the story. Hope next chapters will be better and clear up something for me.
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February 16, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Was the attack fake in order to get Naruto? I think Gaara could kick Sasuke's azz over this lol
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February 16, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Oh wow this was amazing!!!! I totally loved how gaara saved him!!! i really hope they will be able to get to naruto in time!!! It is so great that he is free^^Thank you a lot for posting although you are so busy!!! Hope to see you again soon!!!
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February 11, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Gaara?! I really hope so!!!! Oh I just love this story!!!! I can' wait for more!!!! Hope to see you again soon!!!!
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February 10, 2012 at 12:00 AM
yeah!!!!!!!! Gaara is there?!?
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February 8, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I really hope they will find a way to save both the children and Naruto^^ It really wasn't their fault!!!! And I really hope that Naruto will warm up to Sasuke, cause the way they are at the moment there is never going to be some loving between them!!! I can't wait to hear more from you!!! See you again!!!
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February 7, 2012 at 12:00 AM
This chappy finally brings some light into the situation ^^great!!! I can't wait for the next part!!!
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February 6, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Aww, poor Naruto. I'm glad his students finally told someone the truth! Now hopefully Sasuke will do something about it.