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February 6, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I absolutely love this story so far. I cried in chapter 4, reading how everything played out. In the Center of the marketplace, I'm sure everyone had a turn at poor naruto. And the kids injured, bleeding, forced to watch there "father", teacher, friend, there everything give himself up for them. Forced to watch such a painful horrible thing to someone they truly love. Being unable to do anything at all. I just couldn't keep myself from crying and I love that about this story. I could picture it all and I could truly see and feel the love naruto had for them. To go threw such pain and horror for them, to become a traitor of the village he did everything for. Of the stupid people who hated him for no reason but he still protected.
This story brings out naruto's true heart, and his true strength, and I'm honestly love that about your story as well. I read about naruto's physical strength quite a bit, and he is truly strong and I love that but hes has heart, his strength outside would be nothing without the strength inside keeping him going, pushing him to be the best, but keeping him so pure and true. When you 1st read the story you didn't fall in love with naruto cause of how much he can lift or anything like that, you fell in love of his heart, his soul, his fight. His ability to over come any odd, his ability to take whatever life threw at him, to see the true horror of the real world, but no matter what he kept going.
Much like 2 quotes I love: “If you don't like the way the world is, then change it till you do. – Unknown.” “I alone can not change the world, but I can cast a stone across the waters to create many ripples – Mother Teresa” Naruto does both. He alone slowly changed the world by helping each person he can in his own way. He brings an gives hope to the ones who have lost them, he saves the lives of the ones who were dieing inside. He is a hero in more then 1 way. And with each person he helps each soul he saves, more an more people see threw his kind and wonderful eyes, and they begin to live there lives as best they can, and help who they can. They see the world differently and slowly they too are changing lives. That is the true spirit of naruto, I think. And I love how you showed and brought this out in the story, showed and reminded me why I truly love naruto.
Btw, on the topic of rape above, I thought I should explain something, cause I've read a lot of stories with this topic and a lot of people really miss the mark and this not only ruins the story for me that I tend to never go back to it, but angers me as well. People play it off as nothing. Rape is unlike anything in this world, and I hate when I read a story like [Heaven Sent] a story I'm interested in and is pretty good but then they start to write about rape and what they think it might be like, but they treat it as if its nothing.
Whether it's a stranger or a friend you've known for years, if its not consented sex, sex you tried to stop, if its rape, truly rape...its like being in your own personal horror movie. Your body feels dirty, your heart and mind are trapped in a reply of the event no matter how much you try to stop it, how much you try to scrub your body raw in hops to make it clean. You would do anything to forget.
Rape in something I would never wish on anyone...When a person is raped, part of you wishes to die, but part of you is already dead inside, and its your other half that is keeping you alive, the half that wishes to live, to survive. People just don't understand how serious rape really is, and they write about it but completely lack the true emotions and horror of it. When a person is raped its not like being forced to kiss someone. Or being betrayed by being pushed off a chair and hitting our nose. Then they apologies and its all good after they buy you something you really wanted. With rape, your body might heal but your heart, and your mind will not recover that easily. Only after therapy, true friendships, family an most of all time, will you ever begin to truly forget and recover. And if the person who rapped you truly regretted it and tried to fix it, then it would take a long, long time before you can truly trust and be near them ever again.
An if they didn't care but kept you with them no matter what...and you where forced to be near them, forced to live with them, you would slowly go insane from the fear. You would do anything to escape, anything would be better, living in the street, change your identity, and run to another country, anything to get away and hope to god they never find you again. It's not easy.
But I have to say after reading chapter 4, I did like the way you wrote about it in your story. The children's reactions, of what they were forced to see, the tears and agony in there eyes where perfect and I loved that. The reaction with sakura when she found out was also perfect. Naruto is stronger then anything I know, his spirit when protecting someone he loves is strong, and I can see him reacting like that in your story, but I did like that you didn't make him truly unmarked by the event. The way he was frighted, trying to fight him off with everything he had even though he was strapped down. That was real, an the way he flinched when sasuke touched him, it was perfect. So I absolutely love your story and I can't wait for more.
On an ending note I have to say, I love the way you portrayed Kakashi in this story. He's a bit cocky but at the same time, the way I see it, its not cocky if its true. What others may think as being overly cocky or having a big ego is nothing more then stating a fact if you can back it up. And in this story he can back it all up. Its nothing more then facts. He is better, stronger and smarter then iruka. He wouldn't have been a Anbu back then if he wasn't. Plus he left the Anbu of his own choosing, nothing more nothing less. On the topic of Iruka btw, I sadly don't enjoy this paring at all. I feel kakashi could do better. “xD Why not? He's hot, smart, mysterious, and he has a heart a true kind heart. Plus hes funny when he wants to be, silly even. What's not to love. So I hate that Iruka feels hes better, all it does is makes me want to bitch slap the dick but oh well. Funny thing, I always found Itachi to be the only only person good enough for kakashi. And I always see kakashi as the uki no matter what, even if he must be with iruka. xD (Who I find to be portrayed to sweet all the damn time.) He is a hot ass to have don't you think. (Wink, wink)
Anyway enough of all that sorry for such a long review even I'm surprised. @.@” lets put this to an end shall we, I need sleep after all its 5:40am and I gotta turn in papers in the morning for a job. So over all I love this story, and I can't wait to read more. Oh and I'm interested in your other story “All I have is betrayal”. Can't wait to see how this 1 turns out as well. :3
Kisses
P.s Was listening to If Today Was Your Last Day by Nickelback and I gotta say it sort of fits. It helped with the mood and made me tear up even more then I would have without. <3
This story brings out naruto's true heart, and his true strength, and I'm honestly love that about your story as well. I read about naruto's physical strength quite a bit, and he is truly strong and I love that but hes has heart, his strength outside would be nothing without the strength inside keeping him going, pushing him to be the best, but keeping him so pure and true. When you 1st read the story you didn't fall in love with naruto cause of how much he can lift or anything like that, you fell in love of his heart, his soul, his fight. His ability to over come any odd, his ability to take whatever life threw at him, to see the true horror of the real world, but no matter what he kept going.
Much like 2 quotes I love: “If you don't like the way the world is, then change it till you do. – Unknown.” “I alone can not change the world, but I can cast a stone across the waters to create many ripples – Mother Teresa” Naruto does both. He alone slowly changed the world by helping each person he can in his own way. He brings an gives hope to the ones who have lost them, he saves the lives of the ones who were dieing inside. He is a hero in more then 1 way. And with each person he helps each soul he saves, more an more people see threw his kind and wonderful eyes, and they begin to live there lives as best they can, and help who they can. They see the world differently and slowly they too are changing lives. That is the true spirit of naruto, I think. And I love how you showed and brought this out in the story, showed and reminded me why I truly love naruto.
Btw, on the topic of rape above, I thought I should explain something, cause I've read a lot of stories with this topic and a lot of people really miss the mark and this not only ruins the story for me that I tend to never go back to it, but angers me as well. People play it off as nothing. Rape is unlike anything in this world, and I hate when I read a story like [Heaven Sent] a story I'm interested in and is pretty good but then they start to write about rape and what they think it might be like, but they treat it as if its nothing.
Whether it's a stranger or a friend you've known for years, if its not consented sex, sex you tried to stop, if its rape, truly rape...its like being in your own personal horror movie. Your body feels dirty, your heart and mind are trapped in a reply of the event no matter how much you try to stop it, how much you try to scrub your body raw in hops to make it clean. You would do anything to forget.
Rape in something I would never wish on anyone...When a person is raped, part of you wishes to die, but part of you is already dead inside, and its your other half that is keeping you alive, the half that wishes to live, to survive. People just don't understand how serious rape really is, and they write about it but completely lack the true emotions and horror of it. When a person is raped its not like being forced to kiss someone. Or being betrayed by being pushed off a chair and hitting our nose. Then they apologies and its all good after they buy you something you really wanted. With rape, your body might heal but your heart, and your mind will not recover that easily. Only after therapy, true friendships, family an most of all time, will you ever begin to truly forget and recover. And if the person who rapped you truly regretted it and tried to fix it, then it would take a long, long time before you can truly trust and be near them ever again.
An if they didn't care but kept you with them no matter what...and you where forced to be near them, forced to live with them, you would slowly go insane from the fear. You would do anything to escape, anything would be better, living in the street, change your identity, and run to another country, anything to get away and hope to god they never find you again. It's not easy.
But I have to say after reading chapter 4, I did like the way you wrote about it in your story. The children's reactions, of what they were forced to see, the tears and agony in there eyes where perfect and I loved that. The reaction with sakura when she found out was also perfect. Naruto is stronger then anything I know, his spirit when protecting someone he loves is strong, and I can see him reacting like that in your story, but I did like that you didn't make him truly unmarked by the event. The way he was frighted, trying to fight him off with everything he had even though he was strapped down. That was real, an the way he flinched when sasuke touched him, it was perfect. So I absolutely love your story and I can't wait for more.
On an ending note I have to say, I love the way you portrayed Kakashi in this story. He's a bit cocky but at the same time, the way I see it, its not cocky if its true. What others may think as being overly cocky or having a big ego is nothing more then stating a fact if you can back it up. And in this story he can back it all up. Its nothing more then facts. He is better, stronger and smarter then iruka. He wouldn't have been a Anbu back then if he wasn't. Plus he left the Anbu of his own choosing, nothing more nothing less. On the topic of Iruka btw, I sadly don't enjoy this paring at all. I feel kakashi could do better. “xD Why not? He's hot, smart, mysterious, and he has a heart a true kind heart. Plus hes funny when he wants to be, silly even. What's not to love. So I hate that Iruka feels hes better, all it does is makes me want to bitch slap the dick but oh well. Funny thing, I always found Itachi to be the only only person good enough for kakashi. And I always see kakashi as the uki no matter what, even if he must be with iruka. xD (Who I find to be portrayed to sweet all the damn time.) He is a hot ass to have don't you think. (Wink, wink)
Anyway enough of all that sorry for such a long review even I'm surprised. @.@” lets put this to an end shall we, I need sleep after all its 5:40am and I gotta turn in papers in the morning for a job. So over all I love this story, and I can't wait to read more. Oh and I'm interested in your other story “All I have is betrayal”. Can't wait to see how this 1 turns out as well. :3
Kisses
P.s Was listening to If Today Was Your Last Day by Nickelback and I gotta say it sort of fits. It helped with the mood and made me tear up even more then I would have without. <3
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February 6, 2012 at 12:00 AM
a good story
i hope you dont intend to let sasuke have naruto right away
for taking his dream, for stealing his happiness as teenagers (all the time he was chasing sasuke to come back), for not standing in the cocil and saiing " if naruto is traitor so i am 100 times more" ( or something like this.) sasuke has to pay.
He must suffer.
He must beg
He should kneel before Naruto for all to see (Kazekage, Raikage, Mizukage Tsushikage, all Konoha...)( and say:" Im nothing in comparisotion to you but i beg, i beg, give me a choice." And naruto should walk away till sasuke gives the hokage title to his rightfull owner and sasuke declares " i am property of Naruto. he is my master i am his slave"
MUHAHA
Ok sorry, i got carried away a bit
but i quess my opinion on any Sasunaru is clear (possible in sex, but only if Sasuke is in the powerless and all power and rights are Narutos.)
i hope you dont intend to let sasuke have naruto right away
for taking his dream, for stealing his happiness as teenagers (all the time he was chasing sasuke to come back), for not standing in the cocil and saiing " if naruto is traitor so i am 100 times more" ( or something like this.) sasuke has to pay.
He must suffer.
He must beg
He should kneel before Naruto for all to see (Kazekage, Raikage, Mizukage Tsushikage, all Konoha...)( and say:" Im nothing in comparisotion to you but i beg, i beg, give me a choice." And naruto should walk away till sasuke gives the hokage title to his rightfull owner and sasuke declares " i am property of Naruto. he is my master i am his slave"
MUHAHA
Ok sorry, i got carried away a bit
but i quess my opinion on any Sasunaru is clear (possible in sex, but only if Sasuke is in the powerless and all power and rights are Narutos.)
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February 5, 2012 at 12:00 AM
*snickering* stroking his ego in public... such a double meaning to be found there lol. Thanks for putting that up so quickly for me!!! I like Iruka's slight thaw towards Kakashi... Kakashi is going to have to work for it lol. And you know... I kinda like that it's Sasuke stuck buried under mounds of paperwork since Naruto doesn't get to be Hogake like he dreamed. Serves Sasuke right that he has so much boring work to do. Gosh I really do feel evil that Kakashi and Sasuke are going to have to work to redeem themselves.
I like that Sasuke keeps wanting to be at home with Naruto too. Really fun to read this!!! :)
I like that Sasuke keeps wanting to be at home with Naruto too. Really fun to read this!!! :)
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February 5, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Oh this is great!!!! I want more!!!!
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February 4, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Oh poor Naruto was raped!!! Now I really want to know what happend ^^I can't wait for more!!! See you soon!!
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February 4, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I still can't figure out whether Naruto and Sasuke were in a relationship... I say probably not or Sasuke would not have imprisoned Naruto and Naruto wouldn't be taking the blame and reacting like he hates Sasuke... but... could be wrong. And Iruka hates Kakashi but it seems like Kakashi likes Iruka?
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February 3, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Really nice!!! Thank you ^^
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February 3, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I'm curious to see more. Hope to see you soon!
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February 3, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Naruto told them to lie!!!!!!!!!!!! How can Sasuke be so stupid!!! Orochimaru is gone now so I wonder who it was that tortured the children? New enemy? Sasuke you idiot. I feel so bad for the kids. Naruto probably blames himself for what happened to them since he is their teacher so he probably accepts the blame as what he deserves. I'm liking this story. :)
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February 2, 2012 at 12:00 AM
aaarrrggghhhh!!! of course Naruto isn't really a traitor... he would be protecting someone and getting himself in to this mess. Wonder what stupid thing his students did? After Sasuke treats him horrible I hope he totally grovels when he finds out he was wrong. That's not too evil to want right? :)