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April 16, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I liked it, but it was really odd when you had it all sensual, then just used the word dick. While slang has its places, there are just some words that should not be used in a story like the one you were writing.
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October 6, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Hi!
I really love your story. And you're absolutely right, there's definitely not enough fluffy Kakashi stories in the archieves... To change that, at least a little bit ;), may I translate your story into German for the German fanfiction site fanfiktion.de? I'd send you the link as soon as I uploaded it and of course post the link to your original story in my translation and make it clear that you are the author and I'm just the translator. :)
LittleLuna
I really love your story. And you're absolutely right, there's definitely not enough fluffy Kakashi stories in the archieves... To change that, at least a little bit ;), may I translate your story into German for the German fanfiction site fanfiktion.de? I'd send you the link as soon as I uploaded it and of course post the link to your original story in my translation and make it clear that you are the author and I'm just the translator. :)
LittleLuna
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April 23, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Yep, there're clearly not enough stories about Kakashi and Rin.. a grown-up version, at least; what's more interesting, on the background of his own team. I liked the idea of bringing them together by chance, but i felt a lots of things were left unsaid or maybe done, except for love making. i mean the things and feelings keeping them together as a teammates and friends, things they share. In short, much more to catch up, too little time for a proper reunion.
Things I found strange \ funny: it's really *strange* that Rin kinda "got lost and forgotten", practically erased from Konoha's ninja ranks.. neither dead or alive - is this possible? They what, just forgot about her? Can't believe it. Nor it's natural for her not to try to come back on her own..
Speaking about all hardship he'd been through Kakashi sounds so melodramatic, as if he HAD to do it all, whereas he could have resigned or else.. no one has been forcing him to do this kind of job, nor he's a slave..
"And he let her"(c) - why these kunoichi are always such opportunists in fanfiction, taking poor men off their guard and shamelessly using to their own advantage?:) Poor Kakashi..:) One may say she, not he, got what she wanted..
But the idea of Kakashi and Rin is very good! It's so good that it deserves more attention, probably not a story of M\F kind, but General (?), incl. all that has been "building up" and memories of Obito (?)
Thank you and good luck with your writing!
Things I found strange \ funny: it's really *strange* that Rin kinda "got lost and forgotten", practically erased from Konoha's ninja ranks.. neither dead or alive - is this possible? They what, just forgot about her? Can't believe it. Nor it's natural for her not to try to come back on her own..
Speaking about all hardship he'd been through Kakashi sounds so melodramatic, as if he HAD to do it all, whereas he could have resigned or else.. no one has been forcing him to do this kind of job, nor he's a slave..
"And he let her"(c) - why these kunoichi are always such opportunists in fanfiction, taking poor men off their guard and shamelessly using to their own advantage?:) Poor Kakashi..:) One may say she, not he, got what she wanted..
But the idea of Kakashi and Rin is very good! It's so good that it deserves more attention, probably not a story of M\F kind, but General (?), incl. all that has been "building up" and memories of Obito (?)
Thank you and good luck with your writing!