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very good story, can't wait for an update

i like, when are you going to make more???

hope you continue this!

This is quite enjoyable of a story, At first I thought you hadn't made Naruto male and instead made him a her with a twin sister instead of an older brother of two twin sisters. I am sad to say that I caught you early on in the story instead of about in the middle of it, so now I have to wait the most instead of you being already half way there but this story seems to be worth the waiting period. I do find it humorous that Naruto has been visiting his sisters' grave every year on the day of their supposed 'death' and hasn't been caught even once. Now I originally thought that the storms that always hit Konoha one every year was made by Naruto himself as punishment for what they where thinking of trying on his Kaa-chan, or as a way for him to visit their graves. Now thought, since you only said it happen every year without specifying whether or not it was every year since Konoha was built or every year since Naruto left, I am foeced to ponder that line of thought. any who, keep up the good work and come out with the next chapter soon so I can read it.

It's nice to finally see this story fixed and up again. I would have preferred that you brought this story over to Yourfanfiction mainly so that I could get update emails when new chapters are up since that is hard to do here, but it doesn't matter so much as long as it is continued.

I'll be looking forward to the next chapter Asoka, so don't keep me waiting too long:)

this is absolutely fascinating and i can't wait for more. i cant wait till naru meets his sisters and possibly gara.

Good story, but I hate thinking of the girls growing up in Konoha and you know that old bastard Hokage and his cronies won't do their best to make sure absolutely nothing bad happens to them thanks to the villagers ignorance. Best shinobi village my non existent third ... fourth eye.

Yet another well written chapter. I understand that you are going to go back and do flashbacks, but the time skips that you had in this chapter were a little frustrating to me. I wanted to know the back story of how this and that happened, but again I know you'll do flashback, so I'll be patient. Something else I thought about was are you going to have Naruto interact directly with Konoha characters like Kakashi or Sasuke? It is more than fine if you don't because I feel as though the story could continue just fine without those kind interactions. I was just curious.

This is extremely well written. I am looking forward to future chapters and seeing how the world you have created takes shape.

I'm all for experimenting with and developing manga's boundaries and territory, so to say, but there's always that danger of some "strange" turns of the plot or things that don't quite tie in.
What i did like (as an experiment): not-super-megaloyal to Konoha, redhaired Uzumaki, aware and proud of his Uzumaki lineage and roots - very new, fresh, interesting idea to explore and develop. Naruto who's one and last of his kind - very interesting. It makes him more like Uchiha Sasuke - the character I like most in Naruto universe :) Nor is this Naruto an annoying chatterbox who's always showing off or lecturing about worl's peace etc etc, thanks all kamis! :)

What I didn't like.. OK, it's good that the story's Naruto-centred, on one hand, on the other - it's bad. Uzumakicest or not, the involvement of other well-known characters would be nice. To build a little new world far away from Konoha.. It's up to you, of course.
What I didn't like.. better say found strange:
I can hardly imagine Sarutobi arranging Minato's marriage.. as if anyone could make Minato marry agaginst his will. Thus, you denied the charm of a true love to Minato and Kushina.
Why was it necessary to split Kyuubi's chakra between the girls making them both jinchuuriki = outcasts, unhappy beings? Why not to choose one, so that Naruto had at least one blood relative by his side, if just to tie him down to Konoha, for ever?
Would a real Kushina be happy if her son, a VERY YOUNG son, become an ANBU? Could any mother be?..
A ten-year-old jounin, ANBU Naruto - overkill (my personal opinion). Poor wise, mega-talented prodigy:) I actually don't like anything about your Naruto that resembles Uchihas in any way.. he should be good in his own right, ne?
Why was Mito's death "unexpected"? She was very old, after all, as shown in the series.. why didn't anyone choose a new vessel? The authorities just couldn't let Kyuubi to go into the nothingness: all ninja villages have a demon, a death of one would ruin the balance of power and weakened Konoha.

A shinobi village deciding to kill its late Hokage's wife (a very respected, hero Hokage)?? For the lack of medical supplies and generally hopeless medical condition?? Shinobi world is coming to the end..:)))
In the rush of events Naruto's personality was _described_ (just like the rest of the chapter), it's not a good way to tell the story, like a retelling it.

Well, thank you for a chapter and good luck with your writing at AFF!