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Aww, man. I'm only 10 chapters in, but this is just too good. Where in heaven's name diYou deserve 5 stars

ok, I liked this story it was a little longwinded but that was ok because there was plot and a building drama that I was looking forward to seeing explode. That Drama was Naruto keeping Sakura out of the group and seeing how she was becoming more isolated with each passing chapter. It was so nicely done everything was set in place for epic chapters. . . Then you just throw it all away!

GRRAAA!!! All the possible thing you could have done in the aftermath of Sakura falling victim to that scum. You made her just another girl in his collection when for the entire story you made it clear that she was Naruto's true love! He had his chance to do it the easy way, now he should be forced to fight, cry, and maybe lose her for good!

I barely finished chapter 19 and will not even try to read 20 because I know what ever you have done is a joke compared to what you could have done.

Love the story but I'm dying for another chapter already.

First I gotta say I was disappointed with how you have Pain use two hundred paths for his attack on konoha and then you attribute it to the technology at Ame disposal when it seems more like he is only able to use six in the manga because that is as skilled as he is in using the paths. Since you have him training and preparing in case Konan betrayed him I would understand if he could control ten or twelve paths with training but no more then twenty in just a few months. Also through out this fic you have had Naruto stay away from Kurenia since she was with Assuma, only for you to kill him of in this battle and not just kill him but you have Kurenia make a bad decision during the invasion that costs her her unborn child. Now most likely you are gonna have Naruto's girls have him comfort Kurenia, as well as Yoshina since she know is the head of the Nara clan. But honestly I think it would have been better for your story to have made it so Shikaku, Assuma and the baby to live. Because wasn't part of this story to try and bring peace through the woman he sleeps with as well as for Naruto to do his own part through diplomacy. I mean he already has Hinata, Ino, Tsume and Hana Him going after Yoshina would give him sway over four of the more powerful clans in Konoha. Also I did like what you did with Eroninja Limelight having Naruto and Ino interupt Ino's parents in the hallway. Very nice.

I just finished your latest chapter! I am looking forward to more. You are a great actor in lemon, plot, and action. I was hoping
Pain would still being everybody back. It is sad that so many people died. I really like the way you use people from other video games and anime. Thank you for working hard to share this story with us.

I haven't been back to adultfanfiction in years, happened upon your story and loved it! :) Haven't masturbated like that in years! Can't wait for another update.

Well...that takes the saying "Go fuck yourself" to an entirely new level. Nice.

You know, I was enjoying this chapter until a couple of things. The first of which was Konohamaru and Udon being promoted to Chunin while Naruto is still a fucking Genin. That, in my mind, is pathetic. I don't get irritated often, but that's just annoying. That despite everything, Naruto is still Genin, while Konohamaru of all people is his superior now.

The second thing that irritated me was Soifon. Did you have to include her? She's a bitch in canon, with an unhealthy obsession with Yoruichi. I can already tell she'll be a pain in the ass at some point in the future. No doubt preaching that Naruto is unworthy of Yoruichi. I can already see it.

But my main pet peeve was the whole "Naruto is still a Genin" situation. It truly is pathetic at this point. If you want to discuss it, then hit me up on Fanfiction.net. My Pen name is the same. But I'm honestly losing interest in your story at the moment.

Ouch. That was harsh. Though with how mushy gushy canon is it's nice to see something different for once. Love how pervy Naruko is. Can't wait for the next chapter. Also ignore the dumbasses that keep saying I'm not liking what you're going to do. If they don't want to read a great story just because it could possibly not go their way that's their problem. Update soon.

To be honest I saw the story taking this path but was willing to read further into the story but this is the last chapter for me the whole lets be friends with everyone was already gag worthy but this last episode was just all that horrible sugar and love and unicorn crap that people hate. Good luck with the rest of it but its not a journey I will be joining any of you on.