errorYou must be logged in to review this story.
schedule
January 20, 2013 at 12:00 AM
The silver haired woman
Who is she? Yuffie didn't have silver hair and even if you changed it you still spoke of them as two separate entities.
Hope ch. 35 comes out soon!
Who is she? Yuffie didn't have silver hair and even if you changed it you still spoke of them as two separate entities.
Hope ch. 35 comes out soon!
schedule
January 20, 2013 at 12:00 AM
aweseome chapter...can't wait to read more.
schedule
January 18, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Hello there once again my good sir, I quite enjoyed this chapter, as I do them all, and am quite upset your story was once again removed from fanfiction.net. As such, I figured a small review here that addresses similar points as the one left there would be appropriate. I wish I would be able to copy paste the review left for you there, but sadly it seems when a story is deleted, so are its reviews.
I can see why Naruto would not take on the additional girls that would not be immediately advantageous to his ambition, as he feels he is already neglecting his girls, and no doubt while he knows he will take on more girls, he wishes to minimize the amount without potentially harming his ambition. Such a thing is noble, and while far from what any other male would do with such power, not a one of us could accuse Naruto of being anything than a red-blooded man. Though, the fact that Naruto uses the jutsu so differently than any other man is part of the focus of the fic, so far be it from me to question that.
I am entirely unfamiliar with the chimera arc, and the little knowledge I have of it comes from various fics, so I am unaware of the validity of some of my knowledge. Correct me if I am wrong or missing some of the finer details, as I am sure I am, but a Konohagakure missing nin is attempting to become some ultimate life for my absorbing five potent bloodline through a ritual mixed with a jutsu and science experiment, they being the swift release, scorch release, sharingan, and bloodlines four and five. The nuke nin in question is Hiruko? and has ties with Orochimaru...somehow.
I see the prison arc is soon to come to a head, and I wonder how prepared the forces of poon will be, as they would have quite the bit of egg on their face should they have been preparing for this confrontation all this time only to have the rug pulled out from under them. I am glad to see Naruto's sense of forgiveness and power of change has spread to Kiyomi, and it seems Choumei.
I look forward to your next chapter, and until such a time you wish to post on fanfiction again (which I would not blame you if you didn't), please notify me in some way when the next chapter comes up, by pm or email, so I may once again enjoy your fine porn-with-a-plot. Though either way, I am constantly checking this story to see if chapter thirty-five is up. At any rate, good day sir!
I can see why Naruto would not take on the additional girls that would not be immediately advantageous to his ambition, as he feels he is already neglecting his girls, and no doubt while he knows he will take on more girls, he wishes to minimize the amount without potentially harming his ambition. Such a thing is noble, and while far from what any other male would do with such power, not a one of us could accuse Naruto of being anything than a red-blooded man. Though, the fact that Naruto uses the jutsu so differently than any other man is part of the focus of the fic, so far be it from me to question that.
I am entirely unfamiliar with the chimera arc, and the little knowledge I have of it comes from various fics, so I am unaware of the validity of some of my knowledge. Correct me if I am wrong or missing some of the finer details, as I am sure I am, but a Konohagakure missing nin is attempting to become some ultimate life for my absorbing five potent bloodline through a ritual mixed with a jutsu and science experiment, they being the swift release, scorch release, sharingan, and bloodlines four and five. The nuke nin in question is Hiruko? and has ties with Orochimaru...somehow.
I see the prison arc is soon to come to a head, and I wonder how prepared the forces of poon will be, as they would have quite the bit of egg on their face should they have been preparing for this confrontation all this time only to have the rug pulled out from under them. I am glad to see Naruto's sense of forgiveness and power of change has spread to Kiyomi, and it seems Choumei.
I look forward to your next chapter, and until such a time you wish to post on fanfiction again (which I would not blame you if you didn't), please notify me in some way when the next chapter comes up, by pm or email, so I may once again enjoy your fine porn-with-a-plot. Though either way, I am constantly checking this story to see if chapter thirty-five is up. At any rate, good day sir!
schedule
January 17, 2013 at 12:00 AM
You seem to be falling into the trap many harem fic writers do by adding characters from other sources. I hope this is only temporary because I'm really enjoying this story.
schedule
January 16, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Naruto is getting underestimated... I think he'll be able to rescue Pakura and blow the lid on the bloodline stealers easy.
schedule
January 15, 2013 at 12:00 AM
So I know you're looking for a good other place to post this, might I suggest Archive Of Our Own ( archiveofourown.org ) it's a free to use site, hosts Naruto, Harry Potter, and others, is NC-17 friendly, and best of all: it actually has working e-mail alerts! I've requested an invite to cut around the rather significant waiting list.
Love the story, somehow every time I read it there's a new chapter waiting right when I thought I was done!
Love the story, somehow every time I read it there's a new chapter waiting right when I thought I was done!
schedule
January 15, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Oh, you evil, sadistic, foul, loathsome, genius bastard! THAT is where you decide to end it!? You are a cruel author!
By and large, I'd be reviewing on FFN, but it was taken down, once again. I really dislike their new take on enforcing things x.x I noticed you are now posting on Ficwad as well. I'll try to focus there. I hope you plan to post in both sites? If not, will Ficwad be your new primary?
I absolutely LOVED this chapter. I looked Pakura up on the Naruto Wiki to be sure I knew who we were dealing with (it also helped me get an idea of what was going on through the chapter, thankfully, otherwise, I'd have not really known. The story showed things wonderfully - I just wasn't up on Canon.) I actually realized I needed to do this with a couple of the characters (like Shiho.)
I also have to say, Udon being a potential spy or plant is something I have NEVER seen done before and I rather enjoy it.
Adieu,
Paladeus
By and large, I'd be reviewing on FFN, but it was taken down, once again. I really dislike their new take on enforcing things x.x I noticed you are now posting on Ficwad as well. I'll try to focus there. I hope you plan to post in both sites? If not, will Ficwad be your new primary?
I absolutely LOVED this chapter. I looked Pakura up on the Naruto Wiki to be sure I knew who we were dealing with (it also helped me get an idea of what was going on through the chapter, thankfully, otherwise, I'd have not really known. The story showed things wonderfully - I just wasn't up on Canon.) I actually realized I needed to do this with a couple of the characters (like Shiho.)
I also have to say, Udon being a potential spy or plant is something I have NEVER seen done before and I rather enjoy it.
Adieu,
Paladeus
schedule
January 15, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Wow, things are really starting to heat up! I can't wait to see how things will go with Pakura and the prison. Nice job on Pakura's backstory; so glad she escaped. The lemons were good too, really liked the Mabui/Yugito threesome. I do wish Naruto would use clones during sex more often. Keep up the awesome work and please update as soon as you can!
schedule
January 15, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I told you I'd get off my lazy ass and review more. Love this story. Can't wait for part 2. Also interested in the whole Seven/Mikoto thing. Is that a thing or am I reading into things to much? Either way update soon. Best Naruto lemon ever of all time.
schedule
January 14, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Uuggh, how could you leave us oin a cliffhanger! I hope you cna get out the next chapter soon, if it isn't too much trouble. I jsut really really want to see nharuto rescue Pakura, as well as Chomei and Kiyomi rescue Mikoto!
Overall, great chapter, but now I'm really really antsy for the next chapter. I hope you cna get to it soon.
Keep up the awesome work!
Overall, great chapter, but now I'm really really antsy for the next chapter. I hope you cna get to it soon.
Keep up the awesome work!