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January 21, 2017 at 12:00 AM
The story is wonderful thus far. The plot flows well, the sex added in at just the right moments. But, I must wonder, when are we getting the rest? And the sequel you mentioned?
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September 15, 2016 at 12:00 AM
This is one of the best written and paced fanfictions I have ever read. Shame that you abandoned it...
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September 30, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I like the story a lot but its a shame you stopped but you may want to try to find a fanfic writer to adopt it as it is quite popular by the looks I would do it but I do not have enough ideas to do it myself please if you can find someone to take it and continue I would be grateful.
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May 28, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Really enjoying this story keep up the good work
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June 24, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Wow I love this story its got a great balance of smut and story and you actually can make the characters act like themseles without turning them into sex slaves so to speak please update soon this story is staying in my favorites bar
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March 21, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Nice story. Continue please.
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December 19, 2012 at 12:00 AM
update please
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December 7, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I know people love to exalt Hinata as this paragon of virginal innocence, but an active martial artist, assassin and military personnel having a hymen is far-fetched.
And something just irritates me about Ino apologizing to Hinata. Ino - and Naruto - have nothing to apologize for; it's not they're fault they find each other attractive, and it's not their fault Hinata saw it fit to dither around for several years, and not confess her feelings or even try to get close to Naruto.
Seriously, Ino should have angrily called her out on that. This whole thing falls on Hinata's shoulders; not Naruto's or Ino's.
But so long as it's Ino who gets more attention, I'm fine with it. She landed Naruto first; they seem to be good friends as well. Throwing that away just because Hinata thought she could pine after Naruto without someone else coming into the picture seems wasteful.
I'd also have liked to see Ino more...forceful here, instead of a weeping wreck. Have her realize it subconsciously, and then decide that "I'm not going to give him up." Having Hinata of all people deliver a sermon on bravery when she attempted glorified suicide once and spent the last few years dithering has very little impact, as is ruining Ino's strong personality for the sake of propping up Hinata as a paragon of femininity.
And something just irritates me about Ino apologizing to Hinata. Ino - and Naruto - have nothing to apologize for; it's not they're fault they find each other attractive, and it's not their fault Hinata saw it fit to dither around for several years, and not confess her feelings or even try to get close to Naruto.
Seriously, Ino should have angrily called her out on that. This whole thing falls on Hinata's shoulders; not Naruto's or Ino's.
But so long as it's Ino who gets more attention, I'm fine with it. She landed Naruto first; they seem to be good friends as well. Throwing that away just because Hinata thought she could pine after Naruto without someone else coming into the picture seems wasteful.
I'd also have liked to see Ino more...forceful here, instead of a weeping wreck. Have her realize it subconsciously, and then decide that "I'm not going to give him up." Having Hinata of all people deliver a sermon on bravery when she attempted glorified suicide once and spent the last few years dithering has very little impact, as is ruining Ino's strong personality for the sake of propping up Hinata as a paragon of femininity.
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December 4, 2012 at 12:00 AM
am I missing something? why have you not updated? come on please update I wanna know what happens next!!
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October 7, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Great story, when are you going to post an update?