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Good beginning, I'm glad that Naruto got Sakura first. Hope to see more.

First off, thanks for writing. First, let me say your story is interesting, you had some fun ideas. However, when I read it, the action just kind of feels superficial and short, with little beyond basic narrative. Certainly it's still pretty good, I'm giving you four stars and I hope you keep writing, not just this but in general. Still, you might want to try flushing the details out. How tight was Sakura? How deep? What did Kushina smell like to Kuromaru? Taste like? Make sure to mix it into the motions of sex so the reader doesn't end up skipping ahead, but it should help enrich your story. Again, thanks for writing.

Awesome Man Keep Going With This I Would Like To See More Of This

Dude, awesome story. I really like how you made this original plot line and it even has trace amounts of humor. One way I think you can improve your story is by giving more details on the characters and their actions. Things like explaining how big Kuromaru was compared to Kushina and how big his dick was. Also, dogs have a 'knot' at the base of their penis that locks them into the female and it's significantly bigger. Others include mentioning dick size for the males and breast details. Also, try making the sex acts longer, just read a couple of the good lemons here and you'll have an idea of how to do it. And if you can, can you please update ch.1 with the added details and improvements? I, and i'm sure your other readers would appreciate it. Thanks and keep up the good work.

I honestly would not mind BETAing any of these chapters.

Me Likes, I hope you get Naruto to really get even with Tsunade, also will you be making Hinata as Naruto's wife or will she be his personal sex slave?

Please update quickly. Its not often you see an author who turns kushina into a mega whore with all the fanboys who lose their shit if she's with anyone besides naruto

wtf, you turned kushina into a whore for no reason, and naruto isn't even angry or showed no emotion at all, instead he laughed, wtf is wrong with you. @ian904 shut your dumbass mouth.