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February 16, 2013 at 12:00 AM
This is pretty good! Kakuzu can be hard to write and so far (I'm on chapter three) you've done a fair job. A bit of criticism; I know there will always be cultural differences, but Hidan would never say 'chaps'. Think about that vulgar, sexy little priest, can you imagine a phrase like that coming out of his filthy mouth? Me either. Also, you use the word 'miser' far too much. It's a great adjective, but it can be repetitive and boring to use the same phrases to describe the character.
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September 19, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Awesome story! I can't wait for the final chapter! I hope Kakuzu is a little nicer to Hidan ;p
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September 12, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Love it love it love it!! Finally Kakazu caves!! And a lot less typos as well lmao. Very well done and now I'm REALLY looking forward to the next chapter!!
Especially loved that little bit at the end where Kakazu got all soft and mooshy haha.
Especially loved that little bit at the end where Kakazu got all soft and mooshy haha.
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September 8, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Hilarious, I can't wait for Kakazu to finally crack! Can't wait for the next instalment, but maybe a bit more proof reading needs to be done lol.
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August 27, 2012 at 12:00 AM
thats so funny i hope you keep it up