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July 18, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Awesome! Simply awesome! More women and power to him.
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July 17, 2013 at 12:00 AM
You over use the words little bit and how long is he going to keep wearing that jumpsuit
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July 17, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Love this story and the new chapter was one of the best.With all his amazing skills & perks/abilities that he's gained it's easy to over look that Naruto's stats aren't all that impressive yet and that he still has some ways to go even if the perks/abilities and skills give him a leg up against most he'll face before the skip.
Speaking of which I will be interested to see what you do with the skip, but seeing that you used one of the post Sasuke retrieval arcs I'm guessing there is still at least one more arc that you will feature or one of the movies.
I was surprised that Naruto went defensive on all 3 of his best elements. Water was understandable, as was Wind when thinking of the advantage that will give him on any terrain land or water. And that he combine his water defense with his wind defense when battling on water or land close by a body of water to form and even stronger natural defense that could make him appear godly to weaker foes.
Picking the lightning defense was surprising though, but once I thought about it does open up a lot of very strong possibilities in the future. Like the Storm release and I'm sure E's Lightning Armor. Still would have been cool to shoot lightning out of your fingers on command.
I am surprised by how low his Earth Manipulation is though. It's only at adept level. That's definitely a defensive element might even gain Iron Release and Iron skin from it, which is awesome. The Fire release will be the interesting one. Looking forward to see what the mutation options for that one will be.
And I'm betting once he completes all 5 something interesting happens, but I'm curious if his sub-elements will also open up at some point to being upgraded in similar manner. I guess that's something for after the skip though.
Looking forward to the next chapter in your amazing story. Great job with this, please keep it up :)
Speaking of which I will be interested to see what you do with the skip, but seeing that you used one of the post Sasuke retrieval arcs I'm guessing there is still at least one more arc that you will feature or one of the movies.
I was surprised that Naruto went defensive on all 3 of his best elements. Water was understandable, as was Wind when thinking of the advantage that will give him on any terrain land or water. And that he combine his water defense with his wind defense when battling on water or land close by a body of water to form and even stronger natural defense that could make him appear godly to weaker foes.
Picking the lightning defense was surprising though, but once I thought about it does open up a lot of very strong possibilities in the future. Like the Storm release and I'm sure E's Lightning Armor. Still would have been cool to shoot lightning out of your fingers on command.
I am surprised by how low his Earth Manipulation is though. It's only at adept level. That's definitely a defensive element might even gain Iron Release and Iron skin from it, which is awesome. The Fire release will be the interesting one. Looking forward to see what the mutation options for that one will be.
And I'm betting once he completes all 5 something interesting happens, but I'm curious if his sub-elements will also open up at some point to being upgraded in similar manner. I guess that's something for after the skip though.
Looking forward to the next chapter in your amazing story. Great job with this, please keep it up :)
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July 17, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Wow. Most impressive chapter. Three Oto babes now have slept with him. Hope Kotohime turns out okay. *nods* Maybe Tsunade can help her?
Overall, awesome work here. Very awesome indeed. Keep it up!
Overall, awesome work here. Very awesome indeed. Keep it up!
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July 17, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Kagero? Someone actually used Kagero in their fic? Dude, you have no idea how fucking happy that makes me! Only wish her part had been a bit longer.
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July 16, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Awesome! Three kunoichi for the price of one mission. Sweeeeet!
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July 16, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Nice chapter I glad to see the fuma girls in here and all in 1 chapter
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July 2, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Keep up the work, your doing great on this so far! youve kept up with all the stats etc realy well, i dont see any grammar issues so far, and its a good read!
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June 28, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I like the great majority of the fic. It's one of the best, if not the best 'life is a game' type fics. For most of the fic, you've actually had him knowing how to use, or getting auto scrolls to learn how to use the new game skills he earns, unlike some of these types of fics, where he only seems to have the skills or powers in name, but no clue how to use any of it.
But I was annoyed by a few things. Studying the sealing books from Jiraiya, when his sealing was already at 150 or something crazy. He either shouldn't have needed the books, or studying them should have boosted his sealing higher, as it played out it didn't match with how you'd handled things earlier.
Once he learned the rasengan, like so many other fics, he seems to use nothing but the damned rasengan suddenly. It's his 'big finisher' despite being boring and predictable. You ended the fight with Doto and kabuto and featured it here with this inuzuka chump, all with rasengans, as if Naruto doesn't have dozens of other weapons and abilities.
Doto alone naruto had many, MANY more effective weapons against the chakra armor, but we just got a slight variation from canon. Just saying, if you're going to give him loads of bloodlines and high stats, actually use them. He's easily on par or stronger than any jonin (not elite jonin up to kage level yet), and has so many bloodlines and skills his enemies shouldn't be ready for all of them. Just be careful not to fall into a rut with his move set.
This fic is unique in that it has good plot in between the lemons which is what keeps me reading. I can get pure lemon all over, finding it with a fun, decent plot is rare though, so don't lose that.
But I was annoyed by a few things. Studying the sealing books from Jiraiya, when his sealing was already at 150 or something crazy. He either shouldn't have needed the books, or studying them should have boosted his sealing higher, as it played out it didn't match with how you'd handled things earlier.
Once he learned the rasengan, like so many other fics, he seems to use nothing but the damned rasengan suddenly. It's his 'big finisher' despite being boring and predictable. You ended the fight with Doto and kabuto and featured it here with this inuzuka chump, all with rasengans, as if Naruto doesn't have dozens of other weapons and abilities.
Doto alone naruto had many, MANY more effective weapons against the chakra armor, but we just got a slight variation from canon. Just saying, if you're going to give him loads of bloodlines and high stats, actually use them. He's easily on par or stronger than any jonin (not elite jonin up to kage level yet), and has so many bloodlines and skills his enemies shouldn't be ready for all of them. Just be careful not to fall into a rut with his move set.
This fic is unique in that it has good plot in between the lemons which is what keeps me reading. I can get pure lemon all over, finding it with a fun, decent plot is rare though, so don't lose that.
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June 27, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Love it! I like how you had Naruto beat Ryoji by using Ryoji's underestimation of him to lure him into a trap. The date with Hinata was fun too. Hiashi was hilarious as was Tsunade winning the bet. Though it also is a bit scary as thats supposed to be a bad omen. And I absolutely loved the sex scenes! Naruto taking Hana anally was GREAT, and Naruto using kage bunshin on Tsunade was AMAZING! Big fan of those things incase you can't tell. ;D Can't wait to see what will happen, and who he'll do, in the next chapter! And I'm hoping Naruto will get his full reward from Mikoto and for Tayuya to finish showing how concerned she was soon.
Keep up the absolutely awesome work and please update as soon as you can! :)
Keep up the absolutely awesome work and please update as soon as you can! :)