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I'll be honest. I read the story and skip the lemons. Because the lemons are completely unrealistic, forced in every way, don't have the characters act as themselves...and aren't written that well. Basically, everything is wrong about them. If you'd work on the set up more (the lead-up to the lemons) and left the actual sex scene to the imagination it would have been a hundred times better. Few people can write good sex. Unfortunately, you're not one of them. But you have a decent imagination for a story.

Although a lot of the Bijuu stuff is just bad. Well, frankly a lot of the regular sex pairings come out of nowhere without any reason. The Bee girl might work if Naruto forced her with his skills (pheromone/genjutsu stuff) but as it was written, it broke the pacing. Enemies, enemies, fighting, victory and defeat, enemies...frustration, depression...impossible lust and deep love with no lead-up. That doesn't work.

I vote for the hell path for naruto and I have to say that I love your story to the point where Im almost craving to read another chapter.

one of my fav lemon stories, which i eagerly await the next update from.
Also, has someone just discovered Hellsing Ultimate Abridged, spotted 2 homage scenes already.

Another wonderfully awesome chapter. Thinking about the Human Path it supposedly represents a form of rebirth and enlightenment. But it's based on passion, desire, pride, and doubt. Thinking of the remaining filler arcs Natsuhi, Sumaru's thought to be dead mother, from the Hoshigakure Arc would be perfect. Plus, it gets him another hot babe as a path. She really fits a lot of the criteria well if not perfect.

Sarutobi for the hell path!

How about using Hayate Gekko, the Chunin Exam's Third Proctor, or how about Natsuhi, from the Star Village Arc.

Hmmm, someone for his human or hell path? How about Sarutobi's wife Biwako for the Hell path? that would be rather interesting. *nods*

keep up the awesome work man!

I honestly couldn't finish this chapter. Maybe I'll try later again. But I was annoyed by your kinda BS weakening of Naruto, running out of chakra and all that shit, his paths all having personalities, the stupidity of having a path that hates him, a shadow clone of his running off and doing this on it's own of all things.

All in all, Just didn't like the chapter or his fight with the 4 akatsuki. You continue to seem confused on how tough Naruto is, he's got all these skills, bonuses, abilities, etc. but seems unable to really decimate some pretty weak types as he ought to, and barely able to keep up with folks he should be equal or superior to at this point.

Another awesome chapter. I didn't expect to see this one so soon and glad I was wrong. Loved the fights, but especially loved Naruto's chosen Paths. I'm really looking forward to seeing if Naruto gets more and who those might be. How he got them was especially amusing and glad he did a repeat with Tsunami, but it's a shame Haku wasn't a virgin.

And nice perk from Suzumebachi. Shame he already had Ice Release, but oh well. As always looking forward to the next chapter. I hope the next one involves Shizuka or maybe Toki ... ahhh there are more post retrieval episodes/missions than I remember and more babes. Although it would be fun for Naruto to get it on with Princess Fuku and add a little chubby action as a one off or something.

Your story have somes of the best Lemon ever written, continue like that! You did a great job!

Can't wait to see what you will post next... :)

Maybe a Lemon with Naruko (the Sexy Henge of Naruto) who became somehow real & Naruto himself? A futanari Lemon with a missed version of Naruto "Sexy Jutsu" & another woman?