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December 20, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I liked how you had Minato go a round with the Shinagami although I'm surprised you decided against doing anything with the time frozen Kushina by his side. Maybe you can take advantage of this later when Naruto meets the Kyuubi by having a flashback from the demons' point of view about how he dominated Kushina on a time or multiple occasions?
Also the idea of Mizuki straight up raping Naruko in front of all the potential genin was rather hilarious and frankly I am very much expecting a similar, yet longer scene when Naruto does the Harem Jutsu in front of Ebisu later. Having Naruto enjoy that would be a bonus, but not required.
Hinata then going after Naruto when he fainted was a great idea. I do wonder what will happen the next time she may come into play, but I am hoping that should this story continue long enough Neji takes full advantage of the opportunity presented in the Chunin Exam Prelims to show the Main House what he truly thinks of them. Hinata dealing with anal at this point would be very highly recommended.
Anyway, I was very disappointed that you didn't do anything about the Ino and Sakura getting horny over Mizuki raping Naru scene. Maybe you plan on using this in the future with the prison break filler in regards to Ino? I do hope so.
Well I am rather interested in just what you have planned for Sakura when Kakashi confronts her during the Bell Test. The thought of Kakashi instead of using a genjutsu to show Sasuke dying, but instead showing Sasuke as wanting a blowjob is a good idea. Having this then go with Kakashi removing the genjutsu while Sakura is still busy on his own lower half would make for a great way to finish said scene.
I totally expect Haku to be a chick in this though. Don't disappoint me here, especially if she can show her worth on Sasuke before Naruto arrives(I love Sasuke/Fem Haku lemons, but they are so rare) in the Ice Mirrors. Naruto following this up with a Kyuubi chakra rape scene would be a good idea too. Gato better use his reputation as a slave trader to the full extent as well:)
Well that is enough ideas from me, so I'll leave you here. Thanks for the idea on this story though, as it sounds rather epic to just run through canon events making every possible chance to fill a lemon scene. Keep up the good work:)
Also the idea of Mizuki straight up raping Naruko in front of all the potential genin was rather hilarious and frankly I am very much expecting a similar, yet longer scene when Naruto does the Harem Jutsu in front of Ebisu later. Having Naruto enjoy that would be a bonus, but not required.
Hinata then going after Naruto when he fainted was a great idea. I do wonder what will happen the next time she may come into play, but I am hoping that should this story continue long enough Neji takes full advantage of the opportunity presented in the Chunin Exam Prelims to show the Main House what he truly thinks of them. Hinata dealing with anal at this point would be very highly recommended.
Anyway, I was very disappointed that you didn't do anything about the Ino and Sakura getting horny over Mizuki raping Naru scene. Maybe you plan on using this in the future with the prison break filler in regards to Ino? I do hope so.
Well I am rather interested in just what you have planned for Sakura when Kakashi confronts her during the Bell Test. The thought of Kakashi instead of using a genjutsu to show Sasuke dying, but instead showing Sasuke as wanting a blowjob is a good idea. Having this then go with Kakashi removing the genjutsu while Sakura is still busy on his own lower half would make for a great way to finish said scene.
I totally expect Haku to be a chick in this though. Don't disappoint me here, especially if she can show her worth on Sasuke before Naruto arrives(I love Sasuke/Fem Haku lemons, but they are so rare) in the Ice Mirrors. Naruto following this up with a Kyuubi chakra rape scene would be a good idea too. Gato better use his reputation as a slave trader to the full extent as well:)
Well that is enough ideas from me, so I'll leave you here. Thanks for the idea on this story though, as it sounds rather epic to just run through canon events making every possible chance to fill a lemon scene. Keep up the good work:)