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March 26, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I like how you described Naruto's house. It wasn't some boring list of shit I always skip over reading ("to the left of them was a cozy salon with a small fireplace. In front of them were three doors leading into the bedrooms and one leading into a spacious full bathroom..." I might as well be reading that off a realtor's website), but it actually gave me a really good picture of the house--and more importantly the kind of poverty that Naruto came from. You can tell a lot about Naruto's former life from that house.
I can see why Sasuke was scared of being in there (not only was it in terrible condition, but there were signs of someone living there...), and also why knowing about Naruto's past would make him uncomfortable. At this point, he still just wants to use Naruto, but you can't use a person who you see as more than an object, as a real person with a past and with feelings. I like that the first thing Sasuke is starting to feel for Naruto is just basic empathy for another person, not even attraction so much. I think you can't actually have real feelings for another person if you don't have any empathy for them.
The chapter ended on a real question mark. Will Sasuke take his own good advice about not getting involved with another person and retreat, or will he choose to stick around (and what is it that gets him to stay)? And poor Naruto, he must be lonely if he's kinda hoping to see his stalker again. :P Though I like that he's smart enough to know Sasuke still has ulterior motives about getting him to agree to be in the movie. (BTW, the people in the diner think Sasuke is just romantically interested in Naruto, which is pretty funny, but did Naruto end up telling Ino the truth about where the money came from?)
I can see why Sasuke was scared of being in there (not only was it in terrible condition, but there were signs of someone living there...), and also why knowing about Naruto's past would make him uncomfortable. At this point, he still just wants to use Naruto, but you can't use a person who you see as more than an object, as a real person with a past and with feelings. I like that the first thing Sasuke is starting to feel for Naruto is just basic empathy for another person, not even attraction so much. I think you can't actually have real feelings for another person if you don't have any empathy for them.
The chapter ended on a real question mark. Will Sasuke take his own good advice about not getting involved with another person and retreat, or will he choose to stick around (and what is it that gets him to stay)? And poor Naruto, he must be lonely if he's kinda hoping to see his stalker again. :P Though I like that he's smart enough to know Sasuke still has ulterior motives about getting him to agree to be in the movie. (BTW, the people in the diner think Sasuke is just romantically interested in Naruto, which is pretty funny, but did Naruto end up telling Ino the truth about where the money came from?)
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March 21, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Please keep updating! I love it so far! :) I hope theres not too many more chapters before at least a little bit more 'interaction' happens between them but i'll be waiting to read and find out! Good job, keep it up!
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March 20, 2013 at 12:00 AM
OK I'm pulled in. I love the tug of war going on over this movie. I also love how you've brought Naruto's good guy/selfless qualities into play dealing with Sakura and his values but he still keeps his head around Sasuke. Last, thanks for not bashing. I hope you keep going on this.
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March 20, 2013 at 12:00 AM
More! I want to see Uzumaki crack under the sexiness and persistance of the Uchiha!
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March 19, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Keep it coming.
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March 19, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I'm curious about this story, continue.