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January 5, 2015 at 12:00 AM
hot chapter! i love hot you described the sex scene! if you every want to look other authors who also do good sex scenes check out stromarrow: naruto lemon chronicles, Banging a Brat by Ippikki-Ookami and badass: warfare if the dead by The BadAss Writer!
my suggestion for the next woman: tsunade, kurenai, shizuka!
i hope we get to see a new chapter this year! :)
my suggestion for the next woman: tsunade, kurenai, shizuka!
i hope we get to see a new chapter this year! :)
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May 22, 2014 at 12:00 AM
ok so ive read the story a few times, just to make sure i got it all and every thing and i would first like to say that i mostly enjoy it.
first thing, the monster cock, there is no way that a woman would be able to take 12in dick, there are some that cant take 6in and if you force it you are going to really hurt the woman, even if its just a fictional story, there are some things that really should be considered.
unless the woman had her cervix open, and that really only happens when giving birth or during some kind of surgery, getting into the womb and everything would cause injury, if you were to use a tentacle instead, well it has a small tip and could slowly force things open but thats not the case.
over sized breasts, if every woman has over sized breasts in a story, it starts to become a gag, then it can become annoying because all the women would feel like they are just a copy of the other girl and there is no variety, its ok if thats your kink, but consider the other side of the coin.
over all a nice story, could be better but it still works and i hope you dont take the review personal or anything.
first thing, the monster cock, there is no way that a woman would be able to take 12in dick, there are some that cant take 6in and if you force it you are going to really hurt the woman, even if its just a fictional story, there are some things that really should be considered.
unless the woman had her cervix open, and that really only happens when giving birth or during some kind of surgery, getting into the womb and everything would cause injury, if you were to use a tentacle instead, well it has a small tip and could slowly force things open but thats not the case.
over sized breasts, if every woman has over sized breasts in a story, it starts to become a gag, then it can become annoying because all the women would feel like they are just a copy of the other girl and there is no variety, its ok if thats your kink, but consider the other side of the coin.
over all a nice story, could be better but it still works and i hope you dont take the review personal or anything.
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March 8, 2014 at 12:00 AM
hi,
> I loved your fic "Thank you for loving me," I hope more quickly.
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> I suggest you girls: shizuka, shion, hotaru, and ino seeking redemption.
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> soon.
> I loved your fic "Thank you for loving me," I hope more quickly.
>
> I suggest you girls: shizuka, shion, hotaru, and ino seeking redemption.
>
> soon.
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January 18, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I wanna see Naruto bust out like dude from School Days and sleep with all the fraud girls and show them what they missed out on before letting them tear each other down trying to either get with him or ruin each other's chances trying to get him
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January 1, 2014 at 12:00 AM
This story deserves more reviews, especially at the dawn of the new year. Awesome chapter, with lots of loving action with Hinata and Samui. I'd be pretty satisfied if you left the harem as it is, though it's up to you if you want more. Can't wait for the next one.
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November 30, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Your name may say NaruHaremFan but I see no harem or updates!
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May 19, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Please update! i'm on the edge of my seat waiting for this to update! also would you added Samui into the harem? also a school nurse Tsunade also?!
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April 9, 2013 at 12:00 AM
great lemon
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April 2, 2013 at 12:00 AM
This is perhaps the hottest lemon I've ever read. I mean that sincerely, you perfectly conveyed the passion and desire while still keeping the sense that this wasn't just physical for them but like they were finding their long lost other half. I realize that this will soon be a mini-harem fic but if it was a Naruto/Hinata or just a oneshot this would be awe-inspiring by itself.
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April 1, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Umm I'm new to reviewing on this site so I'll be straightforward. I just made a profile just now on this site so I can follow this story. please make more soon. thank you for making this.