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June 9, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Very nicely done! Your writing is actually fairly high end, no mistakes that I caught, and sentence structure and all that jazz was spot on! The quality of the lemon was fairly high as well, so 2 thumbs up man! Keep up the great work!
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June 9, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Great start,hope to see the next chapter soon
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June 9, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Nice, I hope to see Haruna, Tsunami, or Koyuki in the next chapter. This was well written and I don't see that much of them. Hope you can update again soon.
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June 9, 2013 at 12:00 AM
i like it continue
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June 8, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I am enjoying the story but is there any chance of putting chapter two into paragraphs as it hurts the eyes trying to read it
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June 8, 2013 at 12:00 AM
okay in order, tgreat start even if the second chapter is practically impossible to read,please do something about it, everything si bunched up together, tehre's no space or pharagraphs; next, could you add fuma sasame to the list? from the land of rice (you know where hidden sound is)
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June 8, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Nice pure smut fic. Hope you keep up the good work. Can you had space between the lines next time.
Btw, did you put this on fanfiction[dot]net or any other place by any chance?
Btw, did you put this on fanfiction[dot]net or any other place by any chance?
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June 8, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Nice story so far plz space chapter 2 it hurt my eyes reading a wall of text for more girls maybe yugtio kin and tatyuo(if they are alive) hinata ino tenten ayame
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June 8, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I was thinking keeping to manga girls for now. I was also thinking Kurosotchi next. Please keep up the amazing work. I really like the dominating/submission aspect. Hopefully you use actual bondage in the next scene, especially if you use Kurosotchi grandaughter of the Tsuchikage.
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June 8, 2013 at 12:00 AM
So far, one of the hottest lemon stories I've ever read. Keep it coming!
I hope Anko/Kurenai or Konan is next.
I hope Anko/Kurenai or Konan is next.