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Otherwise, hot story. Not usually one for cheating stories, but this is pretty good.

Any chance of seeing Moegi make her move on Naruto? Or maybe different flashbacks (Chouji, Kiba, SHikamaru with each others mothers, or Ino's mom or Mebuki Haruno.)

Ok how about a flashback where LoliHinata peeped on ShotaNaruto and her mother?

Hmm. On the chapter with Kushina. Why not break it all up into different parts. For instance, Kushina teaches at the academy and gives a rowdy student detention. Then he fucks her after school in an empty classroom. Karin could still be under watch and a young Genin assigned to watch her could then fuck her. Mei's own fucking would be from her new apprentice and then Moegi is on a mission with a few genin who gangbang her?

I think it would really show how much of a slut Kushina is for her to fuck one of her students because they have a big cock.

My only gripe is, I believe you should go into a bit more description. Like dirty talk from the girls, how their big tits bounce around as their fucked, how they scream as their fucked etc.

For the academy orgy, you might think of adding Suzume, a chunin academy teacher from Ino and Sakura's flashbacks (Or maybe as a flashback with the guys from Naruto's class.

glad to hear that u are going to make the story longer, cant wait to see what u do. I do have a question if u do another one how about just having kon is the only guy screwing the girl/girls instead of other guys joining the fun? u could do another story were naruto gets with the older girls anko,kurenai,tsunade,kushina, and so on

a good short smutty read, sure would like to read more chapters with the same theme ( sakura+ino getting fucked by shota would be pretty hot )

Hahaha!! Naruto is gonna throw a fit. But in all seriousness, Naruto wouldn't have the bothers of paperwork. Why? It's call Shadow Clones, and he'd probly be able to make like 3000+ by now.

I have to say for the 1st 2 chapters its very good im so looking forward to the next chapter which im guessing is hinata and then the one with tenten and temari and finaly the last chapter. u should do a chapter were kon goes on a mission with eather hinata or both tenten and temari and they have some fun on the way back.

How about Hinata x Naruto?

Hinata sees Sakura cheating with her Byakugan, she tells Naruto then she confesses H ensues.

glad I could help man and great job on the chapter. if u need any more help just ask I have a fanfiction account also with same name if u need to chat about ideas ill be glad to help. cnat wait to see what u do in the next one