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October 12, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I admit, I haven't read too much of your story yet. I'm a little pressed for time, and was just bouncing around different sites until I found this. I just wanted to stop and say that I am very impressed [and envious] of the amount of details you put into your smut. It entices me to improve my own work...although that won't happen for a while, thanks to school. But that brings me to my second point...post-inflammatory hyperpigmentation, apex of her thighs, anterior fornix...it sounds like someone is in the medical field, mm? ;)
[Sorry if this was entered more than once. It kept giving me a blank page whenever I tried to submit.]
[Sorry if this was entered more than once. It kept giving me a blank page whenever I tried to submit.]
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October 7, 2013 at 12:00 AM
hm....is kai a ninja as well? I'm curious about how he got into her office when she apparently has some sort of security precaution. eh, either way....I like him, right now. haha It was nice getting to know all the kings because they seemed like nice enough guys. I was expecting them to be snobby, but they were pretty down to earth....and slightly perverted.
The tension between sakura and kiba is interesting. I wonder how their relationship is going to survive through that? I wonder if they'll succeed in their mission. They are having a difficult time keeping in character, especially Sakura. Its hard to hide ones intelligence. I'm really enjoying your story. Especially, how you are portraying Sakura and Kiba with faults. yes, they are great ninja but they are not perfect. makes it seem that much more realistic!
The tension between sakura and kiba is interesting. I wonder how their relationship is going to survive through that? I wonder if they'll succeed in their mission. They are having a difficult time keeping in character, especially Sakura. Its hard to hide ones intelligence. I'm really enjoying your story. Especially, how you are portraying Sakura and Kiba with faults. yes, they are great ninja but they are not perfect. makes it seem that much more realistic!
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October 4, 2013 at 12:00 AM
completely enthralled with your story! cant wait to read how it will progress. While I do like reading how Kiba and sakura's relationship is going, I also like hearing about the relationship of other characters like shino and Ino. Will we be getting a glimpse of anything interesting at sasuke's party or will the next few chapters be mainly focused on the mission?
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October 2, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Damn, looks like Ino might be having her own adventures with Shino while Kiba and Sakura deal with their mission. Dunno if you plan another side fic to that, but as I said, I love that couple and the characters of Ino and Shino not to imagine the what-they-are-doing.
However, base on the mission, this will be interesting. But I find this already fun. For one, the men are being sent on seduction missions. Well, Kiba is, at any rate.
Usually you read a fic and it is the girl, but I'm sure the men have had to do it once or twice their own self. And already the emotional, suspicious feelings of a budding relationship begin to play. Sakura doesn't have the experience of Ino, as we can deduct from previous comments, so she isn't as confident in this new role of girlfriend. Not that she hasn't been one, but this is different.
Ino seemed to be able to realize her love for Shino quickly because she already knew it was different from the other men. Sakura doesn't have that experience and it'll take her time, though Ino already seems to know.
Awe, poor Sakura. I admit, she isn't my favorite character, but you make her likable and when she tried to talk to him and apologize he sorta blew her off. Though, not meanly. I wonder if putting off such a conversation is wise and if it will even come up before or during the mission at all.
I might have to officially join this site in order to make sure of the updates that are coming out and whatever other works you might end up writing. It would be worth it.
Thank you for writing this! Can't wait to see more!
However, base on the mission, this will be interesting. But I find this already fun. For one, the men are being sent on seduction missions. Well, Kiba is, at any rate.
Usually you read a fic and it is the girl, but I'm sure the men have had to do it once or twice their own self. And already the emotional, suspicious feelings of a budding relationship begin to play. Sakura doesn't have the experience of Ino, as we can deduct from previous comments, so she isn't as confident in this new role of girlfriend. Not that she hasn't been one, but this is different.
Ino seemed to be able to realize her love for Shino quickly because she already knew it was different from the other men. Sakura doesn't have that experience and it'll take her time, though Ino already seems to know.
Awe, poor Sakura. I admit, she isn't my favorite character, but you make her likable and when she tried to talk to him and apologize he sorta blew her off. Though, not meanly. I wonder if putting off such a conversation is wise and if it will even come up before or during the mission at all.
I might have to officially join this site in order to make sure of the updates that are coming out and whatever other works you might end up writing. It would be worth it.
Thank you for writing this! Can't wait to see more!