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Really interesting. The grammar and all that is done very well. Cant wait! Hope you continue.

This is a very good concept. If you do not continue it, would you mind if I made my own spin of it once my bleach story is done?

I hope this story continues i really want to see what happens next hoping naurto will fall into his role as a master in the coming chapters if this story is going to be abandon or if someone adopted it or needs idea im more then happy to see if i can help

A wonderful story, and I'm sad to see that it only has one chapter. Are you planning to continue?

Interesting start... I'm quite curious, if you do in fact continue this, to see where you go with the story.

What you had Hinata do isn't out of the realm of possibilities, it does make a lot of sense in terms of her 'personality & character traits'.

Same with the her dad, can't really complain as it could be argued since he did in fact abuse her, when he thought her weak and called it training his reaction isn't necessarily an exaggeration.

I'm not worried about Naruto taking advantage of Hinata, why you ask? Simple really, if he could still love & forgive Konaha for there idiotic ways and never once retaliate against them I can only imagine how he'd feel when he finds out that she's liked him for years

Oh, look, feedback. Now continue your fucking awesome story!

Wow...that is the role kunoichi fill in Konoha? Tenten must get worn out really fast with a dude like Lee in her team. I wonder who of the Rookie 12 are actually...taking advantage of such rule and which of the girls bitched(not calling them bitches, just using that verb) about it. Would be surprised if none of them did. Though if Sakura didn't I would understand...she is supposed to have the mindset of "helping the team" from her words in the manga/anime. Though sensei's taking advantage of their chunnin Kunoichi is quite disgusting though.
As long as you make absolutely no mention of Anko in your story I'm good. Just don't do it.

For the readers who don't understand why Hinata would enslave herself to Naruto...it's either that or get fucked whenever on a high ranking mission by the Shinobi on her team whenever they feel like it. And with Hinata's body...they would feel the need to make her serve her role constantly because she is just that amazingly distracting.

Please continue this that is just torture to leave it there. I like the plot alot. Very interesting to know where this will lead.

You should definitely continue. You've got an interesting story so far, and I'm curious as to how their dynamic develops.