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Saddling Shikaku with a little dick is both pointless and unecessary. It's also immature and makes Yoshino's legitimate despair for the state of her marriage seems unimportant - I'd argue that a husband showing no interest in his wife and putting no effort in his marriage is grounds for a divorce alone.

Going that extra step to make him inept and little dicked just ruins it, it makes the chapter seem cheap. Heap onto that Naruto's 'views'...

I'd love it, LOVE IT if Jiraiya fucked Mebuki and taught the little shit a lesson.

To the guy above, why do you have to flame? Is it because you got cheated on and you have a small dick?

Hardly seems like a flame to me but i think he just doesn't like cheating stories which calls in to question as to why is he reading this to begin with,while i like the story he does have a point about the little dick aspect being a poor writing tool and it takes away for the emotional aspect and makes the whole situation seem less profound.

But anyway i really like the story and i hope that you would keep writing,and i must say that its nice to see Naruto starting to get a little pro-active and less passive..cant wait for him to tech those Inuzuka bitches a lesson

Oh and seeing as every other cheating story is about Naruto getting the shaft the author deserves an additional kudos! :)

Keep up the good work! :D

Mabui?

Samui?

Karui?

and am i seeing Temari foreshadows?

wishful thinking lolz

damn ! awesome fic !
this site isnt so popular as fanfiction.net maybe u ll paste your fic there :)

naruto x mature women ! fuck yeah :D fetishes as netorare cheating... maybe u want to try foot fetish or bondage xD

update asap and take care !

make tsume pay ! fuck her into submission... dat old whore !

Hm.. I wonder if Shikaku will tell his sin to not be lazy-ass or there'll be Yoshino/Naruto/Temari scene with Nara men skulking in backgroung..

I like your story a lot, sure its hard to ignore the cheating considering that I think marriage as a sacred union but the fact that its so hard to find some good heterosexual smut stories, especially with Naruto as the main character, is difficult in this website so I bear it. However, I think I will be skipping the future chapters of Yoshino. I don't respect a man who knows his wife is cheating on him and does nothing be it stopping it or leaving. Also what's to stop Shikaku from just getting it from some other woman if Yoshino can sleep around...oh, right, its too troublesome forgot which clan Shikaku belongs to. Still my point stands.

However, I look forward to other chapter with Mebuki or other women. Which makes me curious, will Naruto ever settle down or will he be forever screwed up in the head regarding relationships?

Another awesome chapter. Still, wish it had been a pregnancy that tipped Shikaku off ... anyway loved it and there more more meeting between them. Don't include Shikaku though ... it's one thing if a husband agrees and allows his wife to do her own thing for whatever reason, but to be apart of it is ... sick and more to the point if I was the other man I'd rather kick his butt than let him watch even if he was doing if from the closet.

Enjoyed the chapter, though the way you hint it, Shikaku isn't going to try and improve his *attempts* with his wife in an effort to win her back? ouch. Other thing being you seem to set a lot of the guys (if not all) as rather spineless outside of Naruto and maybe Hiruzen and Jiraya. Are we ever going to see anyone else develop a back bone? Just wondering, not critiquing your choice of development.
Not sure if you do requests, but would you mind throwing in the Jinchuriki Fu during the 3 year trip? Reasons for this request:1. Just a fan of fu in fan-fiction.(thought I'd be honest) 2. Part of me always saw this trip as Jiraya showing Naruto the rest of the world, and just widening Naruto's perspective, and the only other jinchiriki in an allied nation he could have run into and compared notes on life in general is Gaara in Sand, and it is covered that Fu was origanally from waterfall, a Konaha ally village. And other then Nii Yugito, Fu is the only other Female Jinchiriki. Just thinking that the two of them (Fu and Naruto) could have a lot in common. Just some thoughts, that's all.
Oh one more thing? you could always go for the origin of the rasegan for one of naruto's sex techniques. Check this fanfiction, https://www.fanfiction.net/s/7380504/1/Icha-Icha-Paradise-Spiraling-Love for what i mean. If you decide to use it, pplease give credit where its due. If not, i hope you enjoy it at least. Once agian, keep up the good work.