rate_review Reviews

totally love this chapter. mentioned by other reviewers, I hope sakura joins. you also said you may do a side chapter. if you do, perhaps you could write a sakura/mebuki mother and daughter lemon. that could be very hot! well look forward to next chapter!

I like the story and the writing is good, but I wonder if naruto will finally get smart and get revenge on mebuki and tsume?

man great job on the new chapter im so looking forward to see what happens in the next chapter and what else mebuki will show naruto and when tsume will show back up. maybe she will bring her daughter with her? hope that anko and kurenai will join the fun later on? have to wait and see

Damn this story is amazing. 5/5 A+. Straight Shotacon/Domination is the hottest. I Hope Anko and Tsunade get a chance to dominate young Naruto too. (even though it would be noncanon, since tsunade and naruto met at tanzaku town when he was 12, the idea of her dominating or even pegging him is too hot to pass up.)

Like Both new chapter and how it the story slowly but surely building up.
Thanks to consider a Narusakumebu story:)
Yeah it might be hard to fit in this story. If you can pull it off YEAH but after reading the other chapter, yeah it would seem off. If you do another story about it or a one shot Hurray.(If you needed an idea for that, how about Mebuki want to make Sakura realise what she's missing out with Naruto and decide to take upon herself to show her about sex)

Can't wait to see what happen next, another milf or Naruto going back to his sensei to learn a new trick.
Keep it up

nice one, can't wait for the next chapter, would love to see Sakura join them in later chapter

This is great. Finally a decent het lemon for a change. I hope you continue this, you could definatly turn this into a good story. Like if Mebuki where to start sharing Naruto with other women and or have Naruto showing his new techniques to the young girls he meets. Anal sex is always great along with other kinks. Just no blood, piss or scat please.

It's got quite a few, um, grammatically incorrect words. You used "like" instead of "lick" for instance. Other than that, it's well written. I'd love it if you continued it.

Anyway, I recommend that you read word-by-word each paragraph after you've written it. No scanning or skipping words when you review your work. That should cut down on those little mistakes.

Great job.

Keep with it. it's interesting.