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Well after 2 or 3 chapter is geting bored will love it if you add more time and description to scenes because at the moment the idea realy good but you need some plot ass lemons as with his geting the vilage under him . Also is easy to see you are a hinata hater , and thats ok but you need some reason for it. Try to expand your imagination because the start and idea is good but the end result is 4 of 10 . Thats my opinion at the moment al chapters are the same with realy little diference .

More please

Very nicely done. I hope you aren't finished with either of your Naruto stories as I look forward to reading more.

It's....interesting, I'll admit. Not a big fan of the Hinata bashing, but I understand why. Early Sakura was worthy of bashing, but she did wake up in the Chunin Exams.

Could we get a list of who all Naruto will claim, and is he going to take either Fu or Yugito?

This is great stuff please update more

First off, this review is in no way intended as flames, I tried to contain my frustration, if I failed, I am sorry.

I had decided to give this story another chance, it was a mistake.

Your 'payback' is counterproductive and makes me want to write some Sakura-bashing, and that's something I despise!

Naruto has no valid reasons to treat Hinata in such a cruel way, but I'm not going to engage into a rant because you'll probably not care.

Here's just one thing : She would be better treated in Kumo, and I include the constant rape!
In this fic, she's being raped and insulted, if she died Naruto would probably say something along the lines of "damn, the cum-dump broke, gotta find a new one." There's no attachment, no affection she's treated like a furniture!

And the attachment problem is present in your other fic too.

You lost me as a reader. I'm including my e-mail in case you want to argue, but I don't see how you could convince me, or any Hinata fan, to keep reading your story. I understnad how annoying it can be to have one of your favorite characters bashed (yeah, I understand it very well right about now) but 'payback', especially in this form, is not only useless, but counterproductive.

Farewell.

nice.

very good

Too much Hinata bashing for my taste. I mean, seriously? He knows a girl has been holding a torch for him for who knows how long, and he simply turn her into a cock-sleeve? No tenderness? No appreciation for her loyalty? Someone that beat him and abused him is treated better than someone that had feelings for him for the longest time?

And what's that comment in the last chapter? 'at least Kurenai had a personnality' I belive it was. Not really nice to Hinata. I get that you obviously don't like Hinata, but you present Naruto like a bastard that would degrade someone that cares for him.

Man, I tried to read this, but the borked up formatting just ruined it for me. I wasn't even able to discern anything about the quality of the story or writing. The messed up spacing just distracted me too much.

Have you tried fixing those issues? That should make the story infinitely more readable.