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July 5, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I need continuations of chapters 3 and 5 please,they were to good.
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June 9, 2014 at 12:00 AM
i actualy like how your story is written enough to go to ff.net to look u up u also mentioned u would add to this story so i was wondering if i could give u a idea i wanted to see ... wanted to see in the naruto world naruto walking in on hinata after she recovered from neji beat down during chunin exams she has been healed but is asleep on the bed he finds one of the doctors inject hinata with something he is creepy and perverted looking and naruto beats the shit outa him hides him in a closet (or kills him works lol) and seeing hinata asleep and sensitive he has his way with her feeling that he deserves a reward... the thing i was wanting was for him to use the clone jutsu during it... not to mentio no one else actualy has this kinda story on ff.net OR aff.org... and u might be taking requests XD please! msg me if u will wright it or not ! ill fav u on ff.net XD
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May 12, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Love it, maybe a light BDSM, or a slave/master chapter. And they say turnabout is fairplay, so maybe a role reversal. Or if Naruto is in charge, either; clones (a way around the "no other pairings" bit since their all either Naruto or Hinata), toys, or a transformation beastiality (canine:) ). Just a few suggestions for the next chapter or two. Feel free to mix and match any or all of them.
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May 9, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Please correct your disclaimer.
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Your disclaimer doesn't have one of the two parts we need to see. It must say that no money/profit is made. Saying that it’s just for fun or just for entertainment purposes is not enough.
What happens if the disclaimer isn't fixed? We allow seven (7) days for the story to be corrected. After that, we hide it, and it will stay hidden until it's corrected or until it's been thirty (30) days since we hid it. At that point, we do delete the story. If we do hide your story, you can always access it through your Control Panel in your archive profile even while it's hidden. If we do hide your story, and you've fixed it, you can contact the ToS team with the name of your story, your username and the fandom where the story is located to have your story made visible again. You can contact us by email at TOS_team@adult-fanfiction.org. Just one thing: Re-uploads of hidden stories are deleted immediately with no additional warning given.
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May 7, 2014 at 12:00 AM
for what I read so far I have to say the story is very good. and always looking forward to the next chapter. maybe u can do a oneshot were hinata is older and a teacher and naruto is a student?