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May 29, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Heh, this was a pretty nice find. You're a pretty good writer. Eagerly waiting for more.
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May 26, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Best story of the bunch.
What can I say I like pwp.
What can I say I like pwp.
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May 26, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Now chaptzer 5 is fucking interesting.
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May 8, 2015 at 12:00 AM
So what did the smoke do to Kin?
So why did Tsunami call him Naruto-sama when he did not use the smoke on her?
So the smoke when used on someone sleeping makes them think better of Naruto…poor Hinata lol. Would the Tenseigan, Rin’negan, or Satorigan (Juubi’s eye) be able to see him in smoke form?
next chapter that I'll do Kin and Tayuya.
FTW!
So why did Tsunami call him Naruto-sama when he did not use the smoke on her?
So the smoke when used on someone sleeping makes them think better of Naruto…poor Hinata lol. Would the Tenseigan, Rin’negan, or Satorigan (Juubi’s eye) be able to see him in smoke form?
next chapter that I'll do Kin and Tayuya.
FTW!
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May 7, 2015 at 12:00 AM
this is by far my favorite naruto story out there. I'm loving this. so please continue this amazing work.
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May 7, 2015 at 12:00 AM
i saw another review where the idea cam up to have naruto heal hint after her fight with nevi and decide to take payment. he then uses the method he did on tenets and asks who she loves. only to find out its him. that would be so awesome. especially he just changes her to be more confident and awesome. i second that reviewers idea. i hope naruto decides to make her his official girlfriend or something. be cool if he did not have to hypnotize her at all for sex. he just gives her the confidence to be stronger and to come to him or something. make her help him get girls or something.
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May 7, 2015 at 12:00 AM
This is great can wait for the next update
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(Lord_Farsight and treantdeu) Awesome. i second that reviewers idea.
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(Lord_Farsight and treantdeu) Awesome. i second that reviewers idea.
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May 7, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Oh great Mathias-sama, please upload more!!!!
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May 7, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Lol, another great chapter. I quite like the vapire-like 'mist form' he can take. Well, his is smoke, not mist, but you get what I'm saying. XD I also lol'd pretty hard at the thought of Tenten crawling in circles tring to clean up the mess, but not succeeding because she keeps leeking more.
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May 7, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I disagree with other reviewers. If you want Naruto to have an actual relationship in this, that's fine, but it would either have to be someone amoral enough to have no issue with what he does, oblivious enough to never find out, or someone who gets seriously fogged until they are just his doll. One of the worst things a story can do is talk about how ruthless and awful a character is, then immediately turn around and have him fall in love with someone after 5 minutes. I've seen a decent villain protagonist Naruto ruined by "falling in love" with Hinata immediately in the chuunin exams, after being raised by Orochimaru of all people.
That said, having read your stories, I trust you know what you're doing. One point of curiosity, Naruto doesn't feel guilt for things he's doing now, but what about things he did that he felt guilty about before? Like Hinata, the possibility of fathering children who never know him, etc. Will he still have those feelings, or just the knowledge that he DID have them, and have to decide how to act on those facts?
That said, having read your stories, I trust you know what you're doing. One point of curiosity, Naruto doesn't feel guilt for things he's doing now, but what about things he did that he felt guilty about before? Like Hinata, the possibility of fathering children who never know him, etc. Will he still have those feelings, or just the knowledge that he DID have them, and have to decide how to act on those facts?