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This story is good and getting better with each chapter as we get closer to unravelling the mysteries connected to Naruto! I'm so excited please update ASAP and thank you for writing this story.

Still not done reading, but I wanted to leave specific feedback for this chapter. 10/10. I especially like the amount of knowledge demonstrated in this story about law and business; creating an authentic feel, since by incorporating rules and regulations, I do feel a real backdrop of a socio-political arena and that adds a lot more tension to each character. Namely Sasuke.

Can I point out how I loved the way you ended the second chapter?

Sasuke narrowed his eyes at the perfectly composed blond standing in front of him. "What if I tell him that I have no interest in helping him out on this matter?"

Naruto laughed. "Then my guess is he wouldn't try to trick me into doing something like this shit again. So I suppose I'd be grateful."

Grateful? This was... 'shit'? Sasuke knew his brain was still recovering from the mind-blowing orgasm, but he knew he'd just been insulted.

"Get out," Sasuke said, his voice steely.

Naruto shrugged. "With pleasure."

As Naruto was pulling on his shoes, Sasuke asked him the question he knew he should have found out the answer to earlier. "How old are you?"

"A little late for that question, eh, Councilman?" Naruto said tauntingly as he stepped into the elevator.


Just. Excellent. I grinned. You're pretty darn amazing with this, I must say. I might have missed this in the first two chapters, but I myself feel enthralled by something as simple as the mystery of Naruto's age. You're weaving suspense from every possible point, it's just riveting me more in.

Love this fic so far. Hope you update soon!

Very appealing start. I really like the characterizations you're using for both Naruto and Sasuke. Naruto's a bit more jaded than I'm used to seeing, but that works really well for the current plot, where Naruto has to maintain his cool. I was quite relieved to learn in chapter 2 that Naruto had a reason that *wasn't* that he was Orochimaru's new sex slave. I also really like how he approached the "deep appreciation" as a task, rather than some faint-worthy trauma; I like that pragmatism about your characters. ;) Thanks for sharing what you've got. I look forward to more!

Flawless use of characters. So far they seem to fit the roles you've decided. Painfully in character, to the point that even if you weren't using their names, I would know who you were talking about. Great details, lovely description of a blow job. There's good thickness to the plot, even with only two chapters posted. This is easily already charting as one of the top 10 fics I've ever read. 5/5, keep it up.

I'm VERY interested in this story. ^_^

You have to give us more. I loved it, I just about died when Sasuke just lifted his eyebrow! Also, the tone, the plot, the narration. Very, very good.