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This story should end with Pain attacking the village. Tsunade and the others should go to Naruko and ask her to turn back into Naruto and ask him/her to save the village. But Naruko responds that she's no longer a shinobi and indeed has never been, at whicj point they meet death at Pain's hands lamenting what they have done.

I see it now naruto after turning back murders all of konoha oh thisll be a doozy

Hey it would be awesome if naruto also used his male side

Great job asswipe. You've changed one of the most masculine main protagonists into a cock whore of a chick. Thank you for ending life as the ninja world knows it. Dick

will kushina appear in the story

I can't help but agree with 'Mr. Obvious' on this one. Please sort that out. If you can't edit it, then do a re-post and take this one down.

I won't even get into how good or bad this fic is. Mainly because I am a bit biased. I will however say that you should change the description a bit, becuse this is obviosly not a 'Naruto' fic. Naruto, as a character ceases to exist half way through the first chapter. 'Naruko' is obviously more than just a 'guise' by the end of the chapter. So, again, the description is misleading. If you want to write a 'Naruko' slut/whore/cumdump/etc fic, then lable it as such. The title 'Naruko: The Brothel Adventures' would fit the fic better. Hell, 'Naruto' shouldn't even be listed as a character, or have a place in the title of the fic. He's certainly not a part of the 'story,' a term I use very loosely to describe this fic, long enough to warrant his name being anywhere.

not bad on the new chapter looking forward to see what other stuff will happen and wondering are we going to see naruko working with kurenai anko or yugao during the mission?

Can we have a chapter when naruto is out of his female fom and has a really huge break down thinking of the horrible things they made him do big enough to have tsunade visit him and calm him down or use blackmail,against him, can his male form also be used or his male form is cominng back on its self due to narutos willpower is broken? He is a male what used chakra to transform so with his/her chakra sealed his jutsu should start to fade.
But by the end of the story it would be cool if he turned back to his original form

You asked, for suggestions, right? Well here's one, stop using 'his' when referring to women. Since you have stated that this is a translation, it is forgiveable, barely, but it is very off-putting. Please fix it, along with some of the nonsensical grammar around the time when they are all in Tsunade's office. An easy way to test for grammatical errors is just reading it. If a sentence doesn't flow, or you think that there is something wrong with it, then there usually is. With that said, it's a good idea and I hope you continue, but after fixing up the kinks in the chapters already posted.