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Perhaps a public sex machine event, having a machine pump huge dildos in and out of her for hours on end while a milking machine sucks her tits.

This is starting to sound like a badly translated Black Lilith game

I have only one question: will there be any scene with Hinata or any other girl? I know the story is about Naruko, but I'm curious about it.

Please put everything you mentioned in the note page into the story, as for characters could you please add Sakura. Additionally, for the senpai of Naruko (character of other anime), please use Ranma-chan from Ranma 1/2, a.k.a. Ranma in her girl form.

Okay, this could be a good story but it needs some proper English grammar. I was getting an actual headache trying to read the story and that is almost never a good thing.

this story is different but not bad but I can see ino doing this way more then naruto so maybe u could do another one were ino is the one that is sent in instead of naruto/naruko? other then that not bad still

Since you turned him into a mindless slut, konoha should suffer from not having a hero when pain or the war comes up, hell be to busy sucking cock, they finaly broke naruto and now all thats left should be a empty soulless cocksleve

Sexy continue

The idea behind the story is totally sexy. The plot itself is sexy, but the grammar is not. It looks like English is your second language (or maybe you just used an online translator) because your grammar and word usage are, well, atrocious. Honestly, I could get the gist of the story, and I found it incredibly sexy, but as someone who has an appreciation for the well written word, the errors kept taking a lot of my enjoyment out of the reading. My suggestion is to find someone who is English and well written and have them show you what's wrong with your grammar and word choice and how to correct it. Short of that, I don't really know how else you could improve.