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March 8, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Mizuki really; nice story the lemon was well written and the plot was decent, but you could have selected any other male in the series any and it would have been a better male lead. Even one of the elders like Danzo would have been better. Mizuki is that bad a character.
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March 8, 2015 at 12:00 AM
i know the same pairing over and over can get boring, but don't add mizuki. good writing though hope you do more. maybe more sasuke kushina, really liked your other one.
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March 8, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Wow poor choice of character in Mizuki. I'm aware that he was in the first chapter but does this nobody really need to be apart of this story? Just seems random and very poorly thought out for a one-off character. I'm aware that he resurfaces in some filler in the anime but I never watched that garbage. Overall 3/10 story; Into the trash it goes.
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March 8, 2015 at 12:00 AM
You could get a much better response from readers in general by replacing the male lead with iruka or even ebisu hell I'd segestions you write a story with ether of the 2 iruka being the more likable of the bunch
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March 8, 2015 at 12:00 AM
what of naruto?
why has Mizuki not gone after naruto or ran to oro? why did he have sex with the "demon fox" (kushina, since it would have been released she was the former holder)...really would have preferred Naruto or one of the kunoichi or this. the fact Mizuki was getting a lot of sex from a hot girl in canon and yet still ran to a man is very telling.
how were they not caught? Mizuki is chunin and made lots of stupid mistakes...like go to the Hokage's home that has ANBU guards watching it at all times. why didn't they do a DNA test on the baby? it was known that kushina was pure uzumaki and that would mean hher parents and their parents were red heads. Minato would have known that considering he is hokage and such info would have been at his fingerrtips.
why has Mizuki not gone after naruto or ran to oro? why did he have sex with the "demon fox" (kushina, since it would have been released she was the former holder)...really would have preferred Naruto or one of the kunoichi or this. the fact Mizuki was getting a lot of sex from a hot girl in canon and yet still ran to a man is very telling.
how were they not caught? Mizuki is chunin and made lots of stupid mistakes...like go to the Hokage's home that has ANBU guards watching it at all times. why didn't they do a DNA test on the baby? it was known that kushina was pure uzumaki and that would mean hher parents and their parents were red heads. Minato would have known that considering he is hokage and such info would have been at his fingerrtips.
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March 8, 2015 at 12:00 AM
The only reason people are going to complain about this story is that Mizuki is the MC, but who cares it was nice enough.
Hope you make more stories with this similar setting, it will be interesting to see who you pair Kushina with in the next story.
Hope you make more stories with this similar setting, it will be interesting to see who you pair Kushina with in the next story.