That sex scene with Anko was amazing, also I really love the comedy this story and how you stay true to narutos character instead of making him some brooding emo like many writers make the mistake of doing. All in all 10/10
That fight was amazing I love how evenly matched they were.
Arguably one of the abolute best fics on this website. First time I genuinely find myself interested in the plot and I absolutely love the changes yu make to the lore (Hell yeah ofr Naruto knowing some legitimate Wind Techniques). I am also surprised by how tasteful the sex scenes are. Would highly recommend.
I went on to keep reading it on fanfiction.net, which also brought up an issue. According to the intro of chapter 34, you have already posted chapter 33 with the Gaara scene on here, yet anything past chapter 23 has yet to be posted. Is there any reason behind this discrepancy?
I'm enjoying this story, hope you keep it up.
I do love the build-up you seem to be going on there but I had really hoped that he'd get Sakura into his bed in this chapter. The previous one seemed to be building really nicely to that point but ended up anticlimatic! I do seriously hope he gets Hinata in the next one.... Any more "building up" and I'll kill my teddybear! :D
Loving the story so far. Great flow to it
Kill yourself, disgusting delusional pathetic fucked up fatass virgin.
Chapter 4 currently is a copy of Chapter 3. Just so you know.
Please correct your disclaimer.
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