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Great story, very addictive!

Great chapter 

Well another chapter down and another mate wonder what kind of weapons naruto will get with his inheritance

Nice chapter glad to see naruto has marked his mates looking forward to see what happen to his stuff and who took it.

Nice chapter he has 2 of his mates out now just needs to get hinata. I wonder if termai is going to try and join them and also what about the people that still like naruto. wonder how they will take the news he is still alive but left them....for now maybe.

Sup, i'm reading CH 13 and I am confused. I have seen a few things that appear to "pop" out of thin air. the first one, being the information about the setup for kidnapping Hinata, where and when did he get that file? I don't recall you saying where or when, I even went back 2 chapters to find it. second, during the start of the attack, you only mentioned Stone and sound ninja in CH 11? then sand ninja started to appear in CH 12 and 13. Third, having little notes breaks the flow of the story (flow like a river must be a constant)and its distracting because its making a reader think about what you're describing instead of the story, but that could just be me. I would ask that you look over your story/s and check to make sure it flows with your idea, and to make a "Map" of your story, mostly just little notes of where you want the story to go, what key events happen, that sort of thing.

Well i can only imagine how much yelling naruto is going to get form his ladies scaring them like that. Loved the fight scene in the jail and now im hating Jiraya for what he did

great chapter also there should be a sex scene between naruto and tsunade perhaps somthing more

Time ti see how naruto's plan works and what will happen when the dust settles

I'd also like to see a sex scene and relationship between Naruto and Tsunade. I've always liked that pairing.