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Very nice chapter i have a feeling they are going to try and convince haku to be with sasuke if the "old fucks" are the village elders and danzo also i wonder if neji said anything to the main family or if hinata is getting trained she they heard how she did

Going OK so far, but why would Naruto not tell Hayate about being left behind or being threatened by Leaf shinobi after helping them?
At least have him try to get Hayate alone to tell him, since if he does not tell how could Hayate know?
Naruto needs allies in Konoha and especially ones that have the trust of the hokage so not telling him, or someone else, not even trying to, is really stupid.

Very interesting story. Like that it's breaking away from the original story here. I hope Sasuke is kicked out of the program ... though I don't see how he would have been able to ensnare Hinata so easily. I mean, he just awakened his Sharingan ... though since Naruto wasn't with him to help him against Haku like they do in the story he shouldn't have even awoken it since he should have been easily defeated and he couldn't have done it without someone helping him learn how to do it or give him help in doing it. But it's your story, just don't think the Byakugan would fall to a cheap trick so easy especially with so many others around to see him approach her like her teammates he should have sensed something wrong unless one or both were in on it.

One of the best story's i have ever read!!!

Nice story so far glad naruto and kurma are getting along and nice to know naruto is showing that he is strong. Sort of sad that Tsunami was raped but glad she didnt get pregnant, also glad you decide not to let hinata get raped. Cant wait to see what naruto will do to sasuke and kakashi and here is hoping that hinata and haku dont get rapped. P.S. Loved the way haku said she didnt mind being called a slut since she is naruto's slut

Did naruto and hinata have sex before the others arrived it said she was wearing his black shirt but didnt say about anything else

amazing story. i want more. lots more.

update soon please

I like the way this story is going been a while since I read a good dark powerful naruto fic update as much as you can and don't let it die out like so many other stories

well its an interesting story, but i think you need to edit it some more.
there are a few spelling errors and its hard to tell when someone is talking "but i dont want to go to school" that helps

I dont know if you are changing the clan name of Hinata but that was wrong, Chk
nin isnt a term used but if its yours you should explain it.

it shows a lot of potential, just needs some more work.