But was a bit lost on the scene of menmas and narutos scene in random girls bedroom.
Idk if you meant to state who random girl was or not but hinted some things but nothing clear. If you could clear it up on a future author note, it would be greatly appreciated.
Can't wait for new chapters :)this seems like a twisted but fun story to read, lol.
IT NEEDS MORE CHAPTERS!! OMFG, i thought good Adult Naruto fanfiction was dead around here, and here you pop along and slap my face in with this smutty literary masterpiece.
to rework the quote of the newly dubbed 'Dark essence of Naruto' Yume, "“Oh god yessss…I gotta get me some MORE of that.”"
Please correct your disclaimer.
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