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October 10, 2015 at 12:00 AM
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October 9, 2015 at 12:00 AM
It is NOT weird, that Sasuke POV is longer - he is smarter, so have way more things to think of. As for me, however. ;)
Looking at giddy raven is SO funny. He reminds me of a lost kitten, that you just want to look at, as it is trying to put unsure steps with fluffy, tiny legs. Adorable. ;)
Awww. His talk with Dei is just SO ADORABLE. Almost imagining him hoofing in place, trying to look "like good Alfa", even if he is just admiting, he is IN NEED with someone(OMEGA!) help and just panicing. xD
I was thinking, he will go to Itachi, but Dei is, if you think of it, better choise. Image of TWO Uchiha in front of mass of rings, stupified, makes my day, however. ;)
It will be nice to see when Sasuke WILL take blond to car seller - joyful blond will surely be feast for Uchiha's eyes... and heater for his heart. Unless car seller will try and woo Uzumaki, to push him to buy more expensive car... However with angry, posessive Alfa he can also jump from bridge on bedrock. ;)
" One way or another Sasuke would succeed in getting rid of that old car and would get Naruto to drive into a decent car. " - This sentence with all the scene context, made me humm Blondie's song ( One way or another. I'm gonna find ya. I'm gonna getcha getcha getcha getcha. )
What doesn't change my opinion, that a blond is STUPIDLY proud. Now is NOT a time to whine(even with pragnat hormons, dude) about hurted Uzumakis pride, and "not-want-to-make-Sasuke-spill-money-on-him". He should think, that THEIR baby is SAFER in SAFER car. No. It is better to ride some trash on a wheels. =.=
"There's nothing to discuss," - xD Well... Naruto will be good "wife'y"? What is diminutive for "wife"?
Ok... It still bothering me, so I ask. You wrote " two presents". First, I was thinking, one is for Shion, as he will not be left behind... Does Naruto and Sasuke bought SEPERATED presents? Made Naruto REALLY this stupid move, making Sasuke(even if not purpousely) MORE unsure? If the answer is "yes", I wanna slap his head from behind. =.=
It is SO Sasuke-unlike to back off like that( when he asked Dei if he CAN propose at Akihito birthday) ... and still, somehow, it is SO Sasuke-like. xD
Kiddo is good. I almost see him going to tug Uzumakis sleeve impatiently. xD
Damn. I got into Sasuke's memories SO MUCH, that when someone started to knock on the door, I blinked confused. xD
Dunny thing, that even pregnat Naruto was MORE paniced for the DAY of Wedding. As if, after all, Uchiha loved him little bit more, than the blond do Sasuke... But why will I be surprised? After all, as Kishimoto said, "Uchiha love more". Even his "cold feet" case is more like "what if NARUTO will be scarry cat?". ;)
This wedd made even Itachi become emotional. xD
As for ending scene - it is cute and somehow, in all "shortness" of it, seems like it should be. So...
Otsukaresamadeshita! And DEWA MATA, of course! ;)
For all this story I'm giving you... As this serie(from "The Grass..." to "Once in a Blue Moon" (and probably + SEQUEL)become one of my favourite.
5+ RATE! OMEDETO!
Looking at giddy raven is SO funny. He reminds me of a lost kitten, that you just want to look at, as it is trying to put unsure steps with fluffy, tiny legs. Adorable. ;)
Awww. His talk with Dei is just SO ADORABLE. Almost imagining him hoofing in place, trying to look "like good Alfa", even if he is just admiting, he is IN NEED with someone(OMEGA!) help and just panicing. xD
I was thinking, he will go to Itachi, but Dei is, if you think of it, better choise. Image of TWO Uchiha in front of mass of rings, stupified, makes my day, however. ;)
It will be nice to see when Sasuke WILL take blond to car seller - joyful blond will surely be feast for Uchiha's eyes... and heater for his heart. Unless car seller will try and woo Uzumaki, to push him to buy more expensive car... However with angry, posessive Alfa he can also jump from bridge on bedrock. ;)
" One way or another Sasuke would succeed in getting rid of that old car and would get Naruto to drive into a decent car. " - This sentence with all the scene context, made me humm Blondie's song ( One way or another. I'm gonna find ya. I'm gonna getcha getcha getcha getcha. )
What doesn't change my opinion, that a blond is STUPIDLY proud. Now is NOT a time to whine(even with pragnat hormons, dude) about hurted Uzumakis pride, and "not-want-to-make-Sasuke-spill-money-on-him". He should think, that THEIR baby is SAFER in SAFER car. No. It is better to ride some trash on a wheels. =.=
"There's nothing to discuss," - xD Well... Naruto will be good "wife'y"? What is diminutive for "wife"?
Ok... It still bothering me, so I ask. You wrote " two presents". First, I was thinking, one is for Shion, as he will not be left behind... Does Naruto and Sasuke bought SEPERATED presents? Made Naruto REALLY this stupid move, making Sasuke(even if not purpousely) MORE unsure? If the answer is "yes", I wanna slap his head from behind. =.=
It is SO Sasuke-unlike to back off like that( when he asked Dei if he CAN propose at Akihito birthday) ... and still, somehow, it is SO Sasuke-like. xD
Kiddo is good. I almost see him going to tug Uzumakis sleeve impatiently. xD
Damn. I got into Sasuke's memories SO MUCH, that when someone started to knock on the door, I blinked confused. xD
Dunny thing, that even pregnat Naruto was MORE paniced for the DAY of Wedding. As if, after all, Uchiha loved him little bit more, than the blond do Sasuke... But why will I be surprised? After all, as Kishimoto said, "Uchiha love more". Even his "cold feet" case is more like "what if NARUTO will be scarry cat?". ;)
This wedd made even Itachi become emotional. xD
As for ending scene - it is cute and somehow, in all "shortness" of it, seems like it should be. So...
Otsukaresamadeshita! And DEWA MATA, of course! ;)
For all this story I'm giving you... As this serie(from "The Grass..." to "Once in a Blue Moon" (and probably + SEQUEL)become one of my favourite.
5+ RATE! OMEDETO!
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October 9, 2015 at 12:00 AM
This was really nice!!! I liked the flashbacks a lot!!! And Sasuke behaving so ooc with beeing nervous and all was just endearing!!!! Thanks a lot for this wonderfull story and see you in the omake!!!
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October 7, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I haven't been on this site in a while and you put two chapters out. I finally got my moment I was waiting for! It's funny because for the first story in chapter one I reviewed Gaara probably had something to do with the problem. Sasuke's viewpoint really gets a chance to drive things home. I love how Sasuke's alpha side is all like nope, we don't need to be in heat... I'm just waiting for you to catch up and show our mate that we're the one.
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October 7, 2015 at 12:00 AM
This chapter turned out well. I really liked seeing them finally bonk each other silly for a week straight after all they went through to get together. Sasuke's alpha side is still ahead...I'm pretty positive the one time he was like 'hey, don't go at it so hard ' he was internally shaking his head and going 'forget this...pregnant mate to mind'. There's really barely any alpha omega fics in Naruto for it to have so many fics.
I would like to see omake while Naruto is still pregnant or at least see it in the next story.
I would like to see omake while Naruto is still pregnant or at least see it in the next story.
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October 4, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Such a great chapter I can't believe this is all coming to an end :( however I am looking forward to reading the next chapter and sequels to the story:)
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October 2, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I was wondering if you're gonna do a story about Gaara?
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October 2, 2015 at 12:00 AM
As a price for your afford, I decided to give longer and more detailed comment as it is all I can do. ;)
Somehow, when reading your answer(with which I was truly pleased), I visualised Fugaku reaction for Naruto. Mikoto, lovely woman she is, will be easy to win over(as she is seeing her boy happy, so it is ENOUGH)... but I'm curious, how strict Uchiha will react at Omega, who dropped Alpha he was with for YEARS. I think that as much as he is Red-like(I'm talking about Red Forman from "That' 70's show", maybe you seen - good man, deep, deep, deep, deep, deep... inside, under foot-in-the-ass behaviour), beneath grumpy facade he is CARING for younger son and his future, so his Alpha side can be more than aware of Omega, who dropped his long-life-partner( what if he will hurt his familie member?!). Ok. I got with a flow again. Now, to the fic.
" The Alpha inside of him started to croon in delight, but he forced it down. " - Here I was imagining DANCING Susanoo. xD
There is one thing that nagging me a little bit. Naruto was lying to himself and was ready to try and leave Sasuke behind. If Gaara was ABLE to have kids, he will drop his soulmate for him? =.=
If Naruto find his soulmate and his BODY knew it, how was he supposed to STAY with no Sabaku? His body will, probably, reduced his heat without Sasuke around...
And here we come again - me, overthinking. xD
But still, I'm curious of that little things, like how will Sasuke take Naruto wanting to be Gaaras friend again, when time will come...
Or see Karins reaction at "mated" Sasuke showing affection to one of his previous/current(as he was here as one, but IS PREGNAT NOW) patients.
" Any other moment and Sasuke would have liked to examine what exactly this change entailed(...)" - I will risk and say that this is a bonus of soulmates being nearly "mated" heated up by HEAT. ;)
"Something nagged at him in the back of his mind, but he ignored it, preferring to give his full attention to the squirming blond underneath him." - I think, that this was rational part of his mind, wanted to reminds him of "Use protection, brain-washed human." and that Sasuke ignore it is totally GOOD. ^u^ (as I read further)
"Fuck, you smell irresistible," Why, the f***, I ruin(at couple second, but always) REALLY nice M+ scene by thinking "Well, it is Naruto, so probably it's just ramen.". I have this nagging logic-need in me, so I'm subconsiously overthinking and overanalysing everything... Now it get to me, that Sasuke is crazy for tomatos, what giving me a picture of Naruto bathing in Bolonese sauce... x.X
"You asked for it!" - Somehow in this I get a glimpse of canon Sasuke-Naruto relationship in team 7. ;)
I like Uchiha's possessiveness - it is really cute. Also, he just started to really KNOW Naruto. He will learn to trust him. And it is, finally, how it is supposed to be - Naruto get marked in couple DAYS and this is also showing, why(even if he was avowing to be SO IN L-O-V-E with Uzumaki, he didn't want to CLAIM HIM) blond couldn't make Red to Mark him - maybe, subconsiously, Gaara ALSO felt, Naruto is NOT the ONE...he is clinging to Naruto so much, as he have abandon fear. Naruto become one of his constans points and so, taking red head past, one of not-so-many who TRULY cared for him.
"(...)after a first rough week that consisted of him being nearly mauled twice by Kurama and hearing Shukaku hiss at him every time he wanted to touch Naruto(...)" - Here I imagined Sasuke and the cats trying to claim things in the house, before "other" will do that. Don't ask "why" this idea just popped in my mind, when reading it... And I let you know, that I'm starting imagine so crazy things, only, when I'm having FUN with a story. ^y-
Also, I'm really happy of the sequel concept...
Sorry for chaos that this comment become, but it is nearly midnight in my country and my head is sleepy mess. ;)
I'll wait for what you have next.
Somehow, when reading your answer(with which I was truly pleased), I visualised Fugaku reaction for Naruto. Mikoto, lovely woman she is, will be easy to win over(as she is seeing her boy happy, so it is ENOUGH)... but I'm curious, how strict Uchiha will react at Omega, who dropped Alpha he was with for YEARS. I think that as much as he is Red-like(I'm talking about Red Forman from "That' 70's show", maybe you seen - good man, deep, deep, deep, deep, deep... inside, under foot-in-the-ass behaviour), beneath grumpy facade he is CARING for younger son and his future, so his Alpha side can be more than aware of Omega, who dropped his long-life-partner( what if he will hurt his familie member?!). Ok. I got with a flow again. Now, to the fic.
" The Alpha inside of him started to croon in delight, but he forced it down. " - Here I was imagining DANCING Susanoo. xD
There is one thing that nagging me a little bit. Naruto was lying to himself and was ready to try and leave Sasuke behind. If Gaara was ABLE to have kids, he will drop his soulmate for him? =.=
If Naruto find his soulmate and his BODY knew it, how was he supposed to STAY with no Sabaku? His body will, probably, reduced his heat without Sasuke around...
And here we come again - me, overthinking. xD
But still, I'm curious of that little things, like how will Sasuke take Naruto wanting to be Gaaras friend again, when time will come...
Or see Karins reaction at "mated" Sasuke showing affection to one of his previous/current(as he was here as one, but IS PREGNAT NOW) patients.
" Any other moment and Sasuke would have liked to examine what exactly this change entailed(...)" - I will risk and say that this is a bonus of soulmates being nearly "mated" heated up by HEAT. ;)
"Something nagged at him in the back of his mind, but he ignored it, preferring to give his full attention to the squirming blond underneath him." - I think, that this was rational part of his mind, wanted to reminds him of "Use protection, brain-washed human." and that Sasuke ignore it is totally GOOD. ^u^ (as I read further)
"Fuck, you smell irresistible," Why, the f***, I ruin(at couple second, but always) REALLY nice M+ scene by thinking "Well, it is Naruto, so probably it's just ramen.". I have this nagging logic-need in me, so I'm subconsiously overthinking and overanalysing everything... Now it get to me, that Sasuke is crazy for tomatos, what giving me a picture of Naruto bathing in Bolonese sauce... x.X
"You asked for it!" - Somehow in this I get a glimpse of canon Sasuke-Naruto relationship in team 7. ;)
I like Uchiha's possessiveness - it is really cute. Also, he just started to really KNOW Naruto. He will learn to trust him. And it is, finally, how it is supposed to be - Naruto get marked in couple DAYS and this is also showing, why(even if he was avowing to be SO IN L-O-V-E with Uzumaki, he didn't want to CLAIM HIM) blond couldn't make Red to Mark him - maybe, subconsiously, Gaara ALSO felt, Naruto is NOT the ONE...he is clinging to Naruto so much, as he have abandon fear. Naruto become one of his constans points and so, taking red head past, one of not-so-many who TRULY cared for him.
"(...)after a first rough week that consisted of him being nearly mauled twice by Kurama and hearing Shukaku hiss at him every time he wanted to touch Naruto(...)" - Here I imagined Sasuke and the cats trying to claim things in the house, before "other" will do that. Don't ask "why" this idea just popped in my mind, when reading it... And I let you know, that I'm starting imagine so crazy things, only, when I'm having FUN with a story. ^y-
Also, I'm really happy of the sequel concept...
Sorry for chaos that this comment become, but it is nearly midnight in my country and my head is sleepy mess. ;)
I'll wait for what you have next.
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October 2, 2015 at 12:00 AM
This chapter was really amazing!!! I love Sasukes reaction to the baby^^ Soooo sweet!!! Can't wait for the epiloge and the sequal^^ See you again next week!!!!
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September 26, 2015 at 12:00 AM
That was really great!!! I really liked Sasukes conversation with Kakashi^^ That was fun^^ Poor Naruto!!! And Sasuke having mated^^ Interesting that he has mated with naruto without doing much^^ Can't wait for his heat to slam in when he sees naruto^^ Can't wait for the smutt to come!!!