I can't review each chapter individually right?
Uh. The most recent one was amazing.
I understand your concerns about going overboard on Ino.
But IMO it's hot AF and hotness is justice.
Goddamn it's hot.
Do you have any ideas for an NGE story? Also, how many kids will Naruto spawn? How will they be raised?
To bigE
As I said get the fuck out of here!! Your Idea of the world ouside Naruto Harem is what Link29 said! So don't go here and critisize an author that actually LIKE a NarutoxHarem! It a Fanfic, sniper joe can make Naruto as strong as possible, even blocking a susanoo with just a finger and curbstomp your pwecious sasgay! Don't like it? Go jack off to your precious sasgay out of here you hypocrite!
Nice story. Could you make a sasuke ntr fanfic?
ok I'm rereading this, and for a change reread the saruka chapter, i don't know if you changed it in response to bigE and his bull or just to improve your own story but if someone reads it now and doesnt have a clue how the world of this story works there complete morans or willfully stupid
Please tell me that BigE isn't trying that whole reverse psychology bullshit where he critics your work but 'offers' you 'advice' on how to better your story? When your story is the single most popular story on the entire site? Hands down no argument.
I get it, his stories are somewhat popular to the pests this site has been collecting over the past few years where but I think we can all agree that your single story is more important than all his combined and honestly I think that pisses him off. I think honestly that he's threatened by your story and writing skills where his circulates the same generic bullshit he's trying to pass off onto your story. Actually not even just your story because I saw him do the same to another author on here and the dude hasn't posted since.
He's trying the oldest passive aggressive-manipulation assholes use to bolster themselves by systematically tearing down their competition which in all honesty is stupid if he believes for one second that his writing skills are actually worth a damn. I've seen better sentence structure and better plot from my 7yr old nephew, ergo his writing and stories are absolute trash, something I'm guessing he subconsciously knows but radiates in his fanbase full of idiots who couldn't tell their ass from a hole in the ground!
Sorry Sorry, but seeing that technique just pisses me when he knows damn well he's not close to your league in writing but swears up and down 'he's trying to help you' well if his intentions are so pure why is he only trying this with you where your story has bashed his favorite character, when if anything he should probably be the one kissing your ass. You've been gone for a while and came back without missing a step where he's never found the first.
P.S I mean, think about it: Your story is crazily more popular than all his so exactly how could he offer any help?
Even your Mario and Link stories have more credibility than all his. I think that says a lot.
And Dai? No idea what the hell that guy is talking about and at this point wouldn't be surprised if it's just another account of BigE trying to support himself and make himself look like less of an ass than he already has. Their words do seem awfully similar...
I'm guessing you've already figured it out but their words are just a thinly veiled attempt to drag your story to mediocrity...kind of pathetic on their behalf.
@DoesItLookLikeICare
Pft! I'm sorry, but did you ACTUALLY use the logic about the story being more popular more in regards to how there's more reviews? That's the argument you're going with there, right?
If you think that popularity = quality, then you, my friend, have likely written very little in your life.
And you actually have insulted just about every other author on this and many other sites that are plagued with the case of having less reviews despite having more quality in their work by saying that.
Why do you think Kage Sexbomb is so popular? Cause Sniper Joe is able to make high quality work?
No, it's because he's actually writing a NarutoxHarem that he updates, when most of the fics that are around are either Sasuke fics or some yaoi fics. Very little has Naruto be a central figure in them, especially this one where we have Naruto be this huge stud of an alpha that is destined to bitchify every girl that would even gaze upon his perfect body and cock.
The fic's quality can easily be better, and I enjoy several scenes it has, but it's still lacking. I don't care if Naruto cucks everyone and NTRs all the girls. I don't care if he is loved by every girl and envied by every man. But the story has become just overall cheap and tells very little, except wonder which random girl will spread her legs for Naruto next time.
But apparently, because BigE and I seem to be the ONLY ones that seem to have any form of criticism for this fic, we MUST be the bad guys. It's definitely not cause we want Sniper Joe to actually improve the quality of his work. No, we simply MUST hate him because he's writing a NarutoxHarem and cucking our 'beloved' Sasuke.
@Dai
Dude/Dudette, it's porn. SniperJoe even said he's not writing an actual story, he's writing for stroke purposes. Period.
If he wanted to write for plot, just the teasing chapters where he's setting stuff up for the future pretty much says he doesn't need either of your help.
And about me insulting every other author, no I pointed out the pointlessness of either you or BigE talking about quality when BigE has the sentence structure and plot of a 3rd grader, and that's even including if his are just for stroke purposes as well, while you looking for a story inside of a stroke story really says a lot about your thinking. Psst, it doesn't say a lot.
And if an author came to a more erotic based site to write a story that doesn't involve sex and has that 'quality' you keep spouting off about instead of posting it on Ficwad or ArchiveOfourown or FF or literally hundreds of other sites that they can get the credibility they want then chances are they aren't all that bright either. Because tell me, what sense would it make to post a story on a site that people are looking to get off?
SniperJoe delivers that to the T. Whether it's because it's a NarutoxHarem story or not, it's popularity still outmatches everything either of you have written. And whether you like it or not, his popularity on this site is pretty telling and it's not even just this story as his other ones are well received as well because he knows why he's writing the story and its intended audience and delivers efficiently.
And honestly, as much as I hate this saying it pretty much fits here, nobody is holding a gun to your heads and forcing you to read this. So I guess the only question that remains is...
What is your real purpose for your 'offer'? Because sorry, your supposed reasoning has so much BS behind it Helen Keller would both see and smell it miles away.
@DoesItLookLikeICare
Jesus christ, this pissing contest between you and Mr. Dai has gone on long enough.
Give it a rest, will you? No? Okay, then.
Firstly: of course it's porn. We're on a website called 'Adult Fanfiction'. 'Porn' doesn't necessarily mean that it has to suffer a complete lack of logic and good story telling. The best kind of porn is the kind that can sweep you away and engross you.
Secondly: I don't think you know what 'sentence structure' or 'plot' is. In fact, I doubt you've ever actually read any of my stories; and if you have, it's blatantly obvious that you're allowing your preconcieved notions to get in the way of actually making a critique.
Thirdly: as Dai said, popularity means nothing. This story is more popular than all of SniperJoe and my story's combined: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/3201446/1/Neo-Yondaime-Hokage. It doesn't mean it's better, or even slightly decent -- the first few paragraphs have a dozen grammar errors alone. But, oh wait, but your logic it's 'popular' so it's better, yes?
And regardless, I honestly think you must be joking. SniperJoe has written three other stories -- each one has about 10 reviews, and each one is one to three chapters. That doesn't seem as 'well recieved' as you claim considering one of my one shots has about as many reviews as those three stories do combined.
Lastly: are you daft? The real purpose behind our 'offer' is just as Dai said: It's definitely not cause we want Sniper Joe to actually improve the quality of his work. Apparently, wanting to help a geniunely talented author progress past this trap you guys have him locked into is a bad thing. There's a world beyond Naruto harems and endless power wanking and bashing of other characters -- apparently, you haven't reached that conclusion yet.
Have a nice day, :)