Somebody’s butthurt
Great chapter m8, I guess I was wrong about Sai. He wants to please her but knows he can't, poor dude. Well at least he knows naruto can make her happy I guess
to BIGE2955 HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA this coming from a guy that sissifies and cucks naruto on a daily basis in all his fanfictions i mean seriously get the fuck out of here with your shit i mean it's all good when your precious sasuke-sama does it heck you even write rewrites and new versions of it but now that it's not him you find it blasphemous get the fuck over yourself damn it almost everyday you post a sissified cuck naruto fic and when we get something that the rest of us like you cry big crocodile tears over it look if you want to prep up your boy sasuke that's fine no ones stopping you from writing what you write but you don't get to come over here and post a review like that when your just doing the same thing with sasuke only adding sissification and cuckoldry to the mix with naruto as a victim by the way awesome chapter sniper joe looking forward to hear from you more keep it up.
@Link29
There's a difference though. BigE makes it clear that Sasuke is not a nice guy. In fact, he never makes Sasuke be depicted as a nice guy. He's either a jerk, an asshole, a mix of both, or worse. But he isn't someone that's so nice that his behavior is unjustified.
But here, Naruto IS depicted as being a nice guy, or rather is trying ot be, but he performs actions and traits that contradicts with how he's trying to be painted as. I would actually say that Naruto being depicted as this domineering and NTR'ing girls and being an asshole to be far worse than anything Sasuke would do. At least with Sasuke, I can believe he would do what he does. But with Naruto, I can't.
@Sniper Joe:
So I have read your fic for a while now, and this is my first review. I acutally really enjoy the sex scenes as they are really hot, and I love hte dirty talk. I'm sort of okay with the NTR theme you have going for a lot of these girls, even Naruto cucking Sasuke. I would be okay with it, given that my own fic has me having my character do NTR as a central theme.
However, as BigE mentioned and as I said above, your depiction of Naruto to be this nice guy, but then he goes and does these terrible things is just... not flowing. It's contradictory. I would have been okay if Naruto was depicted as an asshole from the get-go.
I mean, look what you did with the Hyuga clan, rendering several of them to be stripped of a name and being referred to as a cumsleeve and a number. Why would Naruto being depicted as the good guy would do such a terrible thing? If he was a grade A asshole from the getgo, sure, I'm cool with that. But you're having people insist that Naruto is some saint or something that people would fall in love with.
Still love the sex scenes and dirty talk, and I'll keep reading, but maybe try to ease up on the contradictory ways you're going with.
Naruto isn't a nice person here. He's an asshole. Stick with that.
still waiting on for the following
ChÅchÅ Akimichi
Hanabi Hyūga
Sarada Uchiha
Tenten
Temari
Moegi Kazamatsuri
Samui
Ayame
Tsume Inuzuka
Hana Inuzuka
Mabui
Mebuki Haruno
okay so i would like to see the following girls in a showdo clone gangbag or something
Good little bit of story-building in this recent chapter. Kinda interesting to have the main sex scene just kind of good no one n in the background and not exactly be the main focus. Still pretty enjoyable to read though, it’s really good to see this story continue so much after its long hiatus.
I feel for Sai in this one. Knowing how the world in your fic works(which I think is a thing certain people in the reviews tend to forget) it was probably the best thing to do, but you can still tell how hard it was for him to do so. Sai’s definitely a good guy, just suck with being dealt the short end of the stick.
As an aside, ff.net can be a bit tricky with lemon fics, especially one this explicit. You might want to try AO3 or Hentai Foundry instead, as the ff one might get taken down for sexual content.
Still enjoying the fic, hope you keep writing!
Great work on the onsen series i love how you are depicting the level of dependance the women have on thier master and your work fills the sexual dominance/superiority fetish perfectly i find your work to be extremely arousing. personally i would like to see the follow up to the breeding maybe a chapter about naruto's pets/slaves being pregnant
went and read some of the reviews for this story. masterkru makes a good point that some of the reader's seam to forget how the world works in this story. I think that you even showed naruto's struggle with it a bit. a Tsunade chapter mainly were she is training naruto with Shizune would probably be a good way of showing naruto coming to terms with struggling with the way he thinks it should be and what this world would even like for real. even though it doesn't really fit with your story theme a hinata only chapter would also be a good way were his girlfriend or fiancee at that point convince naruto she truly wants such extream treatment. showing naruto's main girls and naruto suffering because he was coming to terms with the nature of the world would work. Hinata wouldn't want her man to suffer and naruto I figure would open up to her if he did anyone. arranging something with some of naruto's girls would work for her.
Admittedly, the incest stuff with Kushina really isn’t my thing, which is why I didn’t review them. But they were still very well-written, so I hope you didn’t feel discouraged to write them.
As for the new chapter, I liked mixing things up by giving the perspective of someone other than Ino in the situation. It helps make the situation feel fresh despite being the seventh of a series. I also really appreciate the extra details you had to show how much he loves Hinata. Obviously something like that can get lost in a story like this, but you seem to take special care to reaffirm his feelings for each girl, and that elevates the story above other “character fucks all the girls” harem fics.
I’d actually be interested to see him use his...let’s call them talents, in some sort of interrogation factor, having to break one of the enemy shinobi. You hinted a little bit at it in the Alley chapter, and I’d be interested in seeing that explored in a chapter/series of chapters. If it’s more about breaking the woman than actually loving them, would Naruto be rougher/harder? Could he end up fucking a prisoner so hard she permanently breaks? Could someone like Tayuya, Kin, or Konan been broken so throughly that she’s nothing more than some panting sex pet kept back at Naruto’s home in the yard? I’m rambling a bit, but hopefully I sparked some unrest in a chapter.
Keep it up, you’re stuff is always engaging.
Great chapter. A bit disappointed that this isn't Kushina 3 but oh well. Like how it was from the perspective of the attendant. Loved hinata in this. She was hot. Can't wait to read more