nice chapter I actually feel bad for the attendant maybe you should give her a turn next lol
still waiting on for the following
ChÅchÅ Akimichi
Hanabi Hyūga
Sarada Uchiha
Tenten
Temari
Moegi Kazamatsuri
Samui
Ayame
Tsume Inuzuka
Hana Inuzuka
Mabui
Mebuki Haruno
okay so i would like to see the following girls in a showdo clone gangbag or something
Another great chapter man! And I gotta agree, the Kushina chapter was hot as shit! If you're still looking for ideas for more girls, maybe try the girls from the Road to Ninja movie? That could put a twist on the regular ones, a more assertive Hinata, mousy Ino, etc.? Anyway, can't wait to see the next chapter from ya!
Good chapter bro.
i think this is probably the hottest chapter you have written so far. as for the end of, lemans age, i doubt it just like everything sex-related as there a rise and fall like the tides.
Again, another great chapter. I wonder what type of kinky stuff naruto has planned for hinata and sakura. I feel like I shouldn't be too worried about sai finding out what naruto and Ino have been doing. I mean he did basically ask naruto to be the man Ino needs and wants. Still I want to see how sai reacts since he didn't seem bothered by the idea of it. Good update m8, I shall await for your next chapter
Sorry for not reviewing chapter 19 earlier. I actually saw it a little after it was released, and I actually clicked on it to read it... but, well, stuff came up and I wasn't able to get around to it until now. And, since I've seen that you have updated the story again, I'm going to review chapter 20 in this one too, because why not.
Chapter 19:
This chapter was an excellent follow up to the previous one. If I had to be honest, this is by far the best chapter of your story yet. It's impressive to see how much you managed to top the previous one.
Kushina is...
You write her very well. I adore the way you've written her in this story. It's... great. That's all I can say: it's truly, truly great. My favorite part is when Kushina hesitates to fuck Naruto -- mostly because it's just great.
She's wanted a man for so long. She's seen what Naruto can do. She's fantasized herself in their position. She's begging, wanting, needing it... and then the moment comes. And she realizes how fucked up it is, and how much she doesn't want it despite the fact she needs it at the same time. Absolutely brilliant.
I've always been troubled by your characterization of Naruto in this story, but it's fine here. It doesn't detract from the chapter at least. It's the perfect contrast to the 'eager at first, relunctant in the moment' Kushina.
The ending is nice. The fact that Naruto still doesn't fuck her is probably my favorite part -- you're learning to pace yourself. To build up the reader's anticipation until the chapter when the good stuff finally happens. That's an important thing to do.
Again, good job. Can't wait to see Kushina 3.
Chapter 20:
Am disappointed this isn't Kushina 3. T___T
You got few reviews from that last chapter? What... the fuck?
I'm actually surprised by that. Because honestly, that was the best chapter of this work, and I don't have much faith in your readers if they refused to review that. Damn.
Ugh.
I fancy myself... not a fan of your onsen chapters.
They started off decent enough. But after that scene with Naruto blocking Susanoo with a finger -- a scene which had me laughing with hos absurd it was -- the quality... plummeted. The scene with Ino getting broken was pretty good, but it's clear you're just beating a dead horse by this point.
And I hate the fact that I feel like you're doing it just to bait some more reviews from your readers. I really do.
This one is... okay. I read it. It didn't really speak to me like the Kushina ones did.
Call it the lack of 'plot'. Yes, this is smut, but plot always improves it. The fact that the Kushina chapters had a coherent story to follow, the fact that they were well paced and that there was a degree of sin to it... well, it made it much better in my opinion.
This? This is just mindless smut. Which isn't a bad thing necessarily, but considering this is chapter seven of the Onsen series, I'm disappointed. You could have come up with something original; I know you could have.
But, you've impressed me before. Chapters 18 and 19 were great, and I'm confident chapter 12 will be too. Keep it up -- you're improving. You're doing far better than I originally thought you would, I'll admit that.
Also, that offer to join my discord from way back when is still on the table. I really do prefer delivering reviews in person... makes it a lot easier to get a reply from the person I've giving it to. Here's the link if you're interested: https://discord.gg/4qdeJcx
Ciao!
For the longest time I couldn’t log in but I’ve been keeping up with the updates and I tell ya man I love each and every one though the alley chapter has to be my new favorite I hope another one comes soon also I’d like to see a chapter where Sasuke actually tries(and fails) to get Sakura back
This is the shit plz update soon need to see what happens ... for research
Great chapter, kushina is getting lost in the pleasure and the tabu itself. The sweet words of her son are making her lose her mind. I can not wait for the next chapter.
And since we are in the topic of incest, how about a chapter of Himawari, but already big and with the body of Hinata and Kushina.
Keep up the good work.