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Cool story

good story (even if you make the character expose what they think and feel by making them tell it directly and verbalise consentement too much , by now it's introduced well enought in your story to be implied)

do you plan to contnu it or not ?

Gr8 stuff, update soon!

 

A fascinating fic this has been. While I hate and I do mean hate hinata cheating I do love the tragic story of people pulling a new life from ashes of the old. The dynamics of a ambitious and submissive sarada and her older and mature partner are very well written. The curve ball of this fuller more sexual tart is very nice. the use of her heritage is rather erotic with the eagerness of taste. I wish the inevitable reunion be cold and brutal to show that the two have scrapped those pieces of scum from his heart. I don't expect to see any sound reasons for the betrayal and if the are any let them be as weak and frail as the bonds they had to the family. I want to see those reasons destroyed, not crushed or dismantled, reduced to nothing to show them the folly they wrought.

Please finish this most excellent story.

Well this has been quite a unique story to read... And I greatly enjoyed doing so I hope that you continue this story soon as it has really caught my attention

First off I'd like to congratulate you on a very well put together story, I've had a great time reading it and am wondering what's next. Good job keeping true to the characters and they're personalities so well as well as tempering some of the more impetuous natured ones like Naruto and Sakura with the wisdom of age. The story flow is quite seamless and I very much enjoy the acute but not overpowering level of detail that can sometimes detract from the story itself, so props on nailing the less is more category in my book. I'm glad that you've kept the lime and lemon scenes explicit and juicy without get dark or demeaning, also I totally agree with the age concept of being a ninja, where if you're old enough to kill then you're old enough to be considered an adult as viewed by their society, that includes the benefits of being an adult such as alcohol, sex and the right to start a family with whomever they see fit. I believe you've nailed each of these points and can't wait to read more!

dude awesome job love what you did with sarada and chocho keep it going cant wait for the next one

Another great chapter, as usual. I particularly liked the forest scene with Chocho. Creatively kinky. XD As for guessing at the last girl, I can only really see one of three gals being the last. Sakura, Himawari, or Hanabi. Sakura fits best with how you've developed the story, Hima would add another level of kink but just seems wrong due to her age and innocence, and Hanabi has been a non-entity until recently. Whom ever you go with, one of those three or not, I'm sure it will be interesting.

Man, Chocho's playing with cum made me imagine Naruto covering the food in her and Sarada's lunch boxes with his cum some day when they don't notice.