rate_review Reviews

The idea and overall story is perfect. It's perfect for those that love NTR, especially when it comes to Kushina and Naruto. 

However, the execution itself could use some work. 

For one, the writing style is very rough draft-ish, if you get my drift. I didn't understand why you didn't use quotation marks, and used dashes instead. The writing itself seemed rather rushed, and I feel like you could've put more effort into cleaning it up. On top of that, it's rather strange that Naruto referred to his mother by her first name instead of just calling her "mom." (Also, you could've picked out a better stage name for Kushina than KU. That was kinda lazy, and not to mention that it doesn't even sound like a pornstar name or whatever.) 

Overall, I would give it a 7/10, if only because how much I enjoyed the story despite it's visible flaws. I do hope that you can continue to write some quality NTR fics with Kushina. 

Happy Writing! 

Everything about this fic is trashy. From the over-use of pretty much every gang-bang cliche, to the lack of anything remotely resembling plot. Hell, you can't even get the proper punctuation down for the shitty bits of literature you did get partially right. The grammar is about as bad is the nonexistent plot. The spelling is actually the only thing you appear to be able to do correctly. The characters are shallow, the dialogue forced and cheesy, the entire situation pathetic and unrealist, etc. This is one of many fics that are best left in the mind of the author, where it can't stain peoples impression of what actual literature is.

I feel bad for Naruto u know he is messed up now having your mother say that and disappear like that though way by NTR wonder how he gets his revenge

Netorare is one of the WORST kinds of "adult content" but besides that, this fanfic is obviously just a plagiarized version of the H Anime "Anime Yama Hime no mi"...

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BronxWench,

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Plz write more I love to see them make Naruto eat there cum out of his mom pussy